Poetry Critiques : FLOWER

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  1. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    A
    beautiful flower
    has blossom to a bloom
    wit elegant and radiant glair
    risin in da sun awaken to da moon
    dancin in da shadows
    against da softest tunes
    a flower is born today
    part way from da hidden
    to a life unknown and forbidden
    da virgin vice opens
    da honey suckle drips dew
    sweet melodies runs in virbrant blue
    smiles of da day wisk in da wind
    thatbeautiful flower
    is my lover & friend
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    ahhhh....another metaphoric delight....beautiful colors....i love the rhyme scheme.

    your output is still amazing. I run out of things to say
     
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    Thankz ......I run dry at times and then i soul search.....
     
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    I know I am kind of late on this post, but when I read this, my mind began to form a picture full of color, a short movie in my mind. When words can do that, it can't be denied that they are powerful and can move the soul. You definitely have a nice flow.
     
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    Thank you so kindly
     
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