Black Poetry : Floating...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by abstract219, Apr 20, 2006.

  1. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    Wish I could have taken better
    care of my body...
    Wish they could have stopped
    the cancer sooner...

    I'm just a spirit now,
    Floating over my own funeral.

    If I had my way, I'd pick another church.
    At least one that spelled my name right
    on the obituary...

    I wonder if they knew,
    That I truly loved Sonya,
    but married Adele out of convenience.

    Wish I could have told my brother, Kenny
    I forgave him, maybe he wouldnt cry so hard.
    Wish I could tell Aunt May that hat is too big.
    I wonder if Tara knows the deacons
    Are looking up her dress.

    Im just a spirit now,
    Floating over my own funeral.

    I wonder if the choir knows
    How much I really hate that song...
    Hope they know the Pastor's lying.
    I was not that good of a man..

    That suit is not the one I would have picked.
    My body looks so much smaller,
    and that make-up makes me look too light.

    Im just a spirit now,
    Floating over my own funeral.
    Free from pain, free from it all.

    Wonder if they know,
    In spite of my short time on this earth...
    i truly enjoyed it.
    I truly loved it all.
     
  2. GHETTOAMBITION

    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that was truly a tite drop
    i was feelin it, and visiualizing it as well
    but u had me laughing wen u said yo aunt hat was too big...lol
    so flo on poet
    much luv


    blackluv and bp
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ya pen flowing sweet this piece was very nicely done
    and the big hat had me going flow on now !!!!
     
  4. choclatangel

    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    loved this so fresh, new flo something unusually...flo on.
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Have to agree with choclatangel, this was very refreshing. And I guess a spirit would look upon his/her own funeral in this way, not all sad, often amusing observations, happy to be free. Wonderful write!
     
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