Black Poetry : Flirting With Death

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  1. Versatile

    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My friend challengd me to write this....Its not my style so bear with me....


    Darkness Falls over me
    Engulfing my body
    Turning it inside out
    My organs spill on the floor
    Too graphic to describe
    I'm commiting suicide inside of my own mind
    Only imagining just what it would be like to be in deaths reach
    It's as painless as the time i pierced my own tongue
    Except i hit a vein
    Dark red fluid flows through my mouth
    Filling my tub
    I baptise myself in my own blood
    Pretending it's the blood of Christ
    My lungs are filled
    Theres no need for air
    Oxygen only turns my blue blood red
    But i prefer the darker shade
    I'm falling...falling...I can feel the breeze on my scalp
    I've torn out my hair follicles
    I'm so free, I care less if i land on a sharp rock
    I just love the feeling of my heart racing
    So it can stop beating
    As death catches me in its arms....
    _________________
     
  2. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tell your friend they brought out a talent that you may not have discovered if it weren't for them.
    tight drop fo real!!!!!

    much love,
    plain :angel1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the depth of your pen is born through them .
    very nice write
     
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    wow...those are some images right there...
    intense prose...

    one love
    khasm
     
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    Shades of Stephen King... gave me goosepimples !
    Very affective....:eeek:

    Much
    Peace & Love,
    Akilah :spinstar:
     
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    Seems your friend knew something you did not know
    The depth of each word and thought sends chills down my spine
    Keep flowing
     
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    Very nice..looks like your friend opened pandora's box of unknown versatile scribes
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hauntingly vivid, you definitely hit a nerve with this one. Your friend must have been pleased with the results. Flow on.
     
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