Quiet Poetry Lounge : Flight

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by smoothsoul, Mar 19, 2007.

  1. smoothsoul

    smoothsoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I want to give this to you again...
    Hear what you think...
    Cook with it...have you, again
    Taste it.
    A criminal shame would be to waste it.
    Because, no apparent reason has been found not to go again...
    To not press forward and play at it... or work at it.
    To make a recovery that’s justifiably attuned with my much awaited discovery.
    A reclamation of feeling brought on only by your essence. Your mere presence rewards me.
    You free me... in ways that make words inadequate.
    Get with that...and this...
    I’m listless.

    That’s the gist of this...

    Comments in my context are surely inadequate, but only attempt to show and tell;
    How what fell was like all that’s known as physical.
    You...

    You are like the similitude of gravity...and I am subject to the gravity of situations born of your magnetic pool. In a way; I feel the fool...Wanting to know so much. Culminating in a tender touch that would never end.
    Life gets so sentimental during and in between this... My ongoing internal and external conflict...
    We try to change so it doesn’t stick. Stick and/or stagnate the clear
    and Wanting Heart.
    A heart wanting to tear apart any and all possible chance of misunderstanding.
    But, true feelings, felt...are so demanding
    And golly gee wiz... opportunity is like a slow fizz with the bubbling of these words
    sticking in my throat.
    Ever present shyness not wanting to rock or sink this boat...
    or run aground
    or send Us

    falling

    Then, sprawling...face down
    into that mud...Worse

    To lie there, then roll over and stare up at everything
    Clearly seeing...
    Everything in view...including what works
    with The Me and The You
    was
    and is

    on the up n’ up
    So...again.

    Walk in Solitude
    Knowing I wish it was me with you on that walk
    wanting to talk and
    express those bubbling words caught in my throat
    How I’m continually mesmerized by what your soul writes...
    By what it wrote.

    So...I’m left trying to explain; most of everything and have it all make sense...
    While, within your aura what doesn’t,
    just makes me tense and it creates a spin
    A spin, wherein, I grin attempting to keep above board and focus
    No hocus or its cousin
    Because, really it wasn’t me...

    me...
    really trying or
    attempting or
    planning
    to feel this way...But, besides that point
    it’s all OK
    It’s a Free write anyway... I’ll just stream away!
    Better said...Dream away and come away with ideas,
    thoughts and
    Best n' better wishes.

    Wishes that I can jot down
    and unfold.
    It tries My Patience, but it soothes My Soul.
    Ya see... I’m in a zone, and a dilemma at the
    same time and my mind lacks the quickness to permit my heart and tongue to shine...Together.

    Nevertheless...I Know You are
    Total...and the entire package. The Renaissance Womb of Man

    And you..
    Got me writin n' rewritin you things...

    2 gather...Lo and ve. Letting out and visions explained
    I feel soooooooo helpless n' stuuupid n' lame.
    So I gotta write...
    I don't want to, but I gotta write.
    You did this...
    Another rewrite of rhyme just for you tonight!
    So...again

    Walk in Solitude
    With the full knowledge I wish it was me with you on that walk
    wanting to talk and
    express those bubbling words caught up
    in my throat...
    How I’m continually mesmerized by what your soul writes... By what it wrote
    So...I’m left trying to explain; most of everything and have it all make sense...but
    While, within your aura what doesn’t...makes me tense and creates that spin
    Wherein, I smile and grin
    attempting to stay above board and focus
    No hocus-pocus
    Because, really it wasn’t
    me...tryin to really feel this way...But, besides that point
    Surely, it's all OK
    Free write tonight...and I’ll just stream away!
    ...Dream away
    and come away with
    ideas, thoughts that I can jot down and control.
    Wishing, it was I along with You
    on that stroll...
    How it tries The Patience, but it soothes My Soul.

    It smoothes My Soul over with the presence of
    possibility...
    Pleasantly present because these words allowed much of my feelings to be felt.

    Felt and kept
    closer than the skin that covers me that uncovers me
    emotively to you,

    words that keep landing in your eyes
    and keep my feet on the ground
    even when

    thoughts,
    dreams,
    and sounds abound
    and

    rise outward

    ...back to Sky..........
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte drop and in flight
     
  3. Yemoja'sGoddess

    Yemoja'sGoddess Banned

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    Such passion in words, even though spoken, heard... by the heart, the most important part... of a being... in flight with u, peace I am seeing...

    As Always Job Well Done! :bingo:
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Talk about word play. Each stanza built upon the next as though the thoughts were taking flight. Wonderfully written.
     
  5. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    brother this is beauty beyond measure... enamored by your words... got to get my flow game up:idea: ... :weights:

    much love poet
     
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