Black Poetry : Fleeting Poetry

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Mar 5, 2005.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm writing as fast as I can
    but my pen can't keep up with my
    feelings. As I struggle to write
    myself, out of myself, by
    letting the ink drip out onto the page,
    the ink streams onto my skin.
    What a flow to revel in.
    I bathe in this black ink,
    and it loves me, at least
    that's what I think...
    Why else would the ink stain
    my skin? Out out **** spot. Nothing
    doing said the ink. For I release your pain,
    make your uttering plain
    and your ranting sane.
    I trace your letters with gold
    I grace your quill with drips of wisdom
    you have yet to unfold
    Panting, I try to catch up to that
    fleeting thought
    There goes that rhyme scheme
    I almost caught
    I picked up the pace in this
    "metaphorical" race for naught
    For while running, I stumbled upon
    quite an interesting find
    Some feelings are best left flowing
    within the confines of my mind...
     
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    peace,

    as u bathe in that black ink
    your scribe borns inspiration
    I see that pain is afraid of your pen
    leaving your creative mind to verse & uplift a poetic nation...........

    loved tha scribe sista!!!!!!

    peace
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I guess some folks are just blessed to know the right thing to say, you are one of them brotha. Thank you and peace.
     
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    el expresso through thy ink that stain the skin yet afraid
    as it leak to pad flow on well felt
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No se Rich. Is the ink afraid of me or am I afraid of the ink? Gracias mi hermano.
     
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    This deserves anotha spin at the top

    Loved the concept and it was put together quite effectively

    that part was golden for me

    kudos to you sister poetess
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We can only turn our backs on that pen for so long, then that urge to write comes upon one. Thank you triniti.
     
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    Mesmerizing flow, watz, and the last sentence caught me off guard. You're at the top of your game here, girl.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for the kudos gempis. I wasn't going to add that last line, but it was what I was really thinking, so I just went for it. Appreciated poet.
     
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