Black Haiku : Fire

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Big ol ball of fire
    Just cannot be extinguished
    What keeps it burning?

    Flames diminish so
    I think surely they won't spark
    Silenced by the rain

    All at once I feel
    The explosion of flames just
    when I need them most

    Do I control this
    Fierce fiery orb, or does
    this ball control me?
     
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    Sis Watz, I like how this piece speaks in a kind of analogy. I had to read it a couple of times to get what it means for me.

    1. For me this speaks of tempers, frustration, anger etc of emotions raging out of control.

    2.On another level it speaks of a fire burning with love.


    1. This is where I see the calming energies of others who help to prevent a fiery situation from sparking off and help to keep the peace.

    2. The passion of love has died down.


    For me this says that emotions are needed such as the fire of passion and love.

    1.We should control our emotions and not allow out emotions to control us.

    2. Do we want to control the fire of love & passion.

    Excellent Peace sis :hearts4:
    1UL
     
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    flaming fires spark
    exploding in the night air
    in your eyes tears rain
     
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    Sister soulosophy, I really enjoyed the way you broke down how this piece speaks to you. We often don't know how are words are read, truly, so I appreciated this input. Thanks a million.

    Tears rain from my eyes
    Those fiery explosions
    Don't celebrate me
     
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    each temple of thee
    darkness falls through teary eye
    sadness continue me
     
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    Sadness and anger
    Blend and ignite into flames
    Look at that fire burn
     
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    the wind gives relief
    charcoal blacks,sienna browns
    aah a green leaf floats
     
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    Mental minds held in
    leaves a blaze that kills true love
    fire burning bigger
     
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    the sun

    such a simple yet enormous subject to write on
    it does heal all things as it does separate the "good" and "evil" on our jade-colored rock. we've worshipped it, cursed it, hid from it, and birthed it into each of our own lives. one thing for sure, we haven't fully understood it and much is to be said about OUR yellow center piece. nice poem!
     
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    Yes Sha'iyn, much can be said about that great energy source. I appreciated your input poet, thank you.

    This energy blaze
    Can be love's blessing, when we
    nurture it's power
     
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