Black Poetry : Finally

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  1. PoeticChi19

    PoeticChi19 Member MEMBER

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    you are that poem that I've always wanted to write
    you know.. the corny one
    about soul mates and fantasy fairy tale endings
    in it I'd pour out my deepest sentiments
    hoping that somewhere somehow you exist
    and when you find me, we'd ride off into the sunset
    and live happily ever
    except here we are
    not so happily trapped within the lines of
    a trianle joined together by him
    the reason for our discreet meetings
    meetings that have become less discreet
    and more profound
    with every encounter you claim me
    yet he has no idea
    purposely choosing to ignore the fact
    that I am slipping away fast
    and you are more than just a friend
    more than just this guy from class
    and he is probably more than I deserve
    for he has the courage to love unconditionally
    offering only the best of himself
    while I offer him your leftovers
    left over from the last time you
    looked into my eyes and took every piece
    of me that you could carry and
    I gave it to you willingly
    but he didnt willingly fall in love
    with a woman who's soul was destined
    to mate with someone else
    and when his tears fall
    are you prepared to be the cause?
    because I am
    ready and willing to face
    the rumored wrath of karma
    as long as you'll hold my hand
    his pain will one day pass
    but this
    this thing we have won't
    this undeniable urge to
    recklessly risk it all
    and fall madly in selfish love
    has me ready to committ to you
    selflessly
    with you I feel passion
    and while passion isn't enough
    to keep him from loving me

    it's enough to inspire me to
    finally write this poem
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautifully done :)
    welcome to destee.com :wave:
    i'm gonna place this in our poetry area and not up here.
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    and
    you wrote me
    in ways that no one else could
    you stood
    on the precipice of tomorrow
    and followed your heart
    to a brand new start

    you wrote me

    giving new life and meaning
    to menial words
    of love and passion
    in reaction
    to heart and soul
    as rejection meets the cold
    cold ice
    of a story long told
    one told so long ago

    you wrote me

    to sing your song
    of new beginnings
    and fairytale endings
    and love ever lasting
    yet, still
    you're asking

    is this passion

    ...enough?

    WELCOME TO THE PLAYGROUND.

    very impressed with your entrance.:)
     
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    PoeticChi19 Member MEMBER

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    Ok, thank you :)
     
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    PoeticChi19 Member MEMBER

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    What a wonderful welcome, thank you.
     
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    most welcome beloved sister
    keep flowin ya pen have a beautiful flava
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to Destee's!:wave:

    Though your poem speaks of infidelity and the unhappiness it can create, it’s a beautiful poem and full of sensitivity that places the reader right in the middle of the triangle.

    Well written and enjoyable!

    Again welcome!

    Coco
     
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    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As a man who’s a firm believer in following one’s passions, I can definitely relate to the emotions expressed within this beautiful piece of work. Each sentiment was conveyed with a pureness that could only come from baring the nakedness of a person’s soul. As bias as my opinion may be, I truly believe you made the right choice. Love without passion is like life without poetry . . . meaningless to me.
    Lyr1c
    #finallyindeed
     
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    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This isn’t a poem,
    that’s right,
    THIS IS NOT A POEM,
    by any stretch of the imagination,
    and poetry is just that,
    with it’s ability to find beauty in the mundane,
    the monotonous,
    and you my love . . . are it’s opposite epitomized.
    How can I find beauty in and of its self?
    How can I define something so indescribable?
    How do I find a metaphor for something
    that can only be compared to itself?
    The mirror’s reflection isn’t even comfortably comparable.
    I can see its insecurities,
    even it feels like a failure,
    and I will not share in its shame.
    I WILL NOT WRITE YOU A POEM,
    because as far as I’m concern . . .
    You are GOD’s personal poem to me, and how could I really top that?
     
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    PoeticChi19 Member MEMBER

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    you can start with loving me
    deeper than the deepest oceans and seas
    with a burning desire to discover every part of me
    we'll discover each other
    revelling in likes and dislikes
    trips and kisses that exceed
    the french vision
    I want to listen to
    your heart beat at night
    from this very moment
    until the end of your life
    let's grow old running from what ifs
    and passionless encounters
    I don't plan on ever topping God's gift
    I don't plan on ever topping you
     
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