Black Poetry : Few blue reasons

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Dream Weaver, Mar 25, 2003.

  1. Dream Weaver

    Dream Weaver Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I hate you
    because I hate blue
    the color of the first thing I saw in you
    your jeweled eyes that shone like
    an inverted sun with no sky
    and our first date
    on the beach sorrounded by the cerulean liquid
    that so tired us and inspired us
    to lay in the arms of each other
    and whisper love's secret
    when u placed the sapphire crystal on my finger
    because you knew it was such I favored
    and made me stream that which makes love poignant
    and mellow yet so heavenly
    a cornflower field was where we laid
    my head on your chest
    listening to your heart beat
    while you ran your fingers through my hair
    and a blue hazey dream
    I fell in
    my illusions were filled with you
    only to arise from my slumber
    and you were gone
    all thats left
    is cobalt...
    thoughts of you
    thats makes me blue
    Did I tell you?
    I hate you.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    funny how he pose a heated hated love

    very nice flow
     
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    StarGoddess Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yo!

    THIS **** WAS TYTE!!!

    YOU SURELY HAVE A NEW FAN IN ME....I AM DIGGING YOUR WORK

    **STARSTRUCK**
    :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Dreamweaver really u need to flow dis cross da mic
    come on to da DESTEE POETRY CHAT and blow dis
    to perfection dis need to be heard !
    come wit me ova their..............
     
  5. Dream Weaver

    Dream Weaver Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cindy, good therapy is exactly what it was, writing is always therapy to my soul. StarGoddess, stardust junkie?? Luvin it thanks.
    Rich I would love to join poetry chat...just too shy.
     
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    You found that one you love to hate. Dag...got one of them myself. But I don't think I could describe the feeling as well as you did here. Love it.

    Serenity...
    She
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ooowee, i'm lovin' it! yo word play on this piece and the imagery that it brings is jus tyght.


    ~~~scribeitonout~~~
     
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    u do indeed weave dreams in color, poet. this piece was quite evocative, i could hear the pounding of the waves along with the pounding of the protag's heart...while through it all, the power of the last line puts it in perspective. haunting drop, poet.
     
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    My sister I feel your strength you are a real sister of wisdom it is a honor to be in the company keep it coming. God bless you
     
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    I'm glad that blue lagoon trip didn't leave you blue-

    1poetsought ~
     
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