Poetry Critiques : female eyes

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  1. selecta

    selecta Member MEMBER

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    Tribute to all the females

    In midst of it all
    They are there
    Wondering themselves why
    Why are they here
    Through the hurt, misuse of earthly men
    Along with the tribulations of being woman
    Just like man they hurt and want to be loved
    Yet their emotions are on a different level
    They cry, moan late at night
    I love you says the earthly man
    Does he mean it? Does any one man understand?
    Screaming and nobody hears
    Forgive men of their sins and pray 4 their souls
    It is just the devil showing him self
    Do not blame man even though he failed the test
    U were built for success
    Not for all that mess
    Kneel ask God for happiness
    Ask God for his forever love
    God is only man to fear
    God loves you my dear
    Rise sister become a queen
    Rise above all, you have destiny
    Rise you have a purpose
    Rise because you have heart
    Rise because you want happiness
    Rise and take your bed and walk your healed
    Rise because you have beautiful female’s eyes
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was nice and hit points , it would have been even more deeper
    with maybe two stanzas to bring out the rawness of the poem but
    i love how it hit
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome Selecta

    I'm feelin' the evidence in good faith,

    Woman... the edification of man ~

    Continue to do your thang! :great:
     
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