Black Poetry : Feelings

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MADDRAPPER, Apr 15, 2002.

  1. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feelings

    Yo complex manipulation leads to sex with hip rotation
    Even my Lex has an imagination it’s text on location
    Kiss lips in vibration then trips off ejaculation and masturbation
    Smoochee and juicy infatuation a loosely sensation feel elevation
    Legs spread like wildfire her style require kissing and a sapphire
    Hissing an empire of reminiscing this thugs listening not a liar
    Love so complete as it tug at your feet hug between the sheet
    Affection almost equal to a lethal injection it seem so sweet
    Intersection where lips meet, a reflection of horniness deep
    Hard to divorce the force of attraction a source of satisfaction
    Like words on a printed page a chapter of vented rage in heat
    Took a fresh look as her breast shook like jell-o behave unique
    Crave to eat her fruit I’ll slave for this cute give a brave salute
    Paid for her body like a prostitute just to get laid and constitute
    My feeling that is pealing off my pants in romance no chance
    To escape her love crush the blood rush like mail advance
    Special delivery with shivery abstract shapes in my brain
    Like my back break from pain but the sex fact remain
    Serve love food put the nerves of a thug in the mood
    Oh how rude now protrude between the thighs with attitude
    Involve the job of a superman a doorknob and a computer scan
    My tutor understands learn to read and turn to heed to her demands

    MADDRAPPER PEACE
     
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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HEY YALL CAN CRITIQUE THIS I DON'T CARE BRING IT NEED A RESPONSE

    HEY YALL CAN CRITIQUE THIS I DON'T CARE BRING IT NEED A RESPONSE
     
  3. Legendof_1_Spirit

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    <appears suddenly>

    Hey you flipped it on this one, the flow is tight and the follow thru of your lines is constant and steady. Seems more constructed and thought out and your tone of voice is a lot more confident and secure, more relaxed.

    <disappears>
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    MADD again u pose a masterful scribe my brutha
     
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    Do yo thang Boi!!

    Great Flow on this piece here Madd!! I dig fo sho!!:toast:
     
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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Legendof_1_Spirit, $$RICH$$ AND Rashad dang yall came through on this one for real loving this go tto keep dropping true
     
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    MADD,

    Me thinks you still need to spit summa this **** on the Spoken Word!!!

    Kewl read bro!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GQ THANKS FOR RESPONDING TO THIS FOR REAL YO HAD TO DROP IT ON YA
     
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    umph!umph!umph!

    Sounds delicious to me!
    I'll have some of what she's having.
    Now RAPPER you know I love your style
    and I have been off pen for a while.
    You know how addictive Destee can
    be. But, this poem told a story it didn't
    bore me, this is one to email to the girl
    friends to let them know that the heart
    of a poet can indeed beat inside the body
    of a blackman! Whoa.......that's my next
    poem...I just achieved Mental Orgasm...
    I'll be smoking a cigarette now!:hot:
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!
     
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    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    --props for it..dat's what constructive criticism does -yet still I heard you but never from you...so I'll reflect it in rhyme
     
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