Black Poetry : Feelings Unleaving(New to the Forum)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by GiftedEssence, Oct 14, 2003.

  1. GiftedEssence

    GiftedEssence New Member MEMBER

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    *On all other sites I've been to I had to respond to poems before posting, was I supposed to do that here too, I apologize if I was*


    Constantly I ask myself if I could change things in the past,
    But I come to realize that all that pain and agony will forever last.
    Because at times I feel like I've moved beyond all means,
    But then I fall out of bed because it seemed to be just a dream.
    I look in the mirror and tears begin to form in my eyes,
    At times they just sit there at other times they fall and I cry.
    How can one have such an emotional strain build up inside,
    Causing negative outlooks on the world but still I lie,
    In bed trying to figure out what tomorrow will bring
    A positive me or another day full of things not meant for me.
    At times I think of the best in life hoping that someone special will set me free.
    But when will this pain go away,
    When can I be certain that things will change and I will be ok?
    I cant if I keep putting myself through these things,
    Negativity, hurt, pain, and backstabbers pulling on my sleeves.
    Yea I dislike myself, at times I hate me,
    But its not like its going to change anytime soon because my veins will soon run out of blood to bleed.
    So all I have left is God, faith, and a little bit of family.
    My truth, honesty, and my self-esteem.
    Which is too low at times to even get by,
    I just try to go on with life hoping that time will quickly pass by.
    But I constantly wonder why,
    I feel so unattractive and unwanted inside.
    I have a lack of sensation and pride.
    But yet I still survive,
    Knowing what tomorrow will bring.
    A negative beginning hopefully with some form of positivity.
    So I close my eyes as I terminate all means,
    Of people hurting and bringing pain to me.
    Because my heart is too broken to beat,
    Or allow my soul to be set free.
     
  2. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was very very deep...much love to you and i feel what you're going through because i'm in the same place you are at time...i will keep you in my prayers though.

    and WELCOME!
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this alot....WELCOME TO DESTEE!
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: WELCOME
    :wave: to
    :wave: Destee....
    :wave:nice flow...
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    " So all I have left is God, faith, and a little bit of family.
    My truth, honesty, and my self-esteem. "

    You have plenty to take you into tomorrow.

    This is very tight. I like it. Keep it flowing GiftedEssence

    Over flow with it.

    Welcome to Destee...
     
  6. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GiftedEssence, this was straight from the heart. I really like your flow, and this was so raw and honest. Welcome! Great to have you here and look forward to seeing more from you. :) :wave: :wave:
     
  7. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a real poet indeed...with such sincerity of flow...

    Welcome....Welcome....Welcome

    I"ll look for more of you!
     
  8. islander

    islander Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You are not at all alone! There is always someone going through something similar, we just express it in different ways.
     
  9. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:

    WeLcOmE :D

    dis scribed packed poetic punch that knocked me out :D
    and no you dont HAVE to give love to other poets but...love is a circle...give it if you got it and watch it come back to ya :)
    looking forward to more :)
     
  10. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome poet....
    this right here was on point....i found myself writing the same way and about the same stuff when i first started...
    but this was really heartfelt...keep doing ya thang poet.....
    and you'll grow along with your work...you'll grow in life..i feel it...

    one love.....
     
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