Quiet Poetry Lounge : feeling

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by TotalView, Jul 7, 2011.

  1. TotalView

    TotalView Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    something inside
    me moves
    with utter calm
    slow and patient
    cloaked in grace
    touching me
    here there
    there here
    and everywhere
    my pulse taking
    even breaths
    my eyes smiling
    the poison
    exiting my pores
    onto the hardwood floor
    no pain just peace
    thankful that my God
    revealed to me my truth
    and chose to lay me
    in the sunshine
    instead of in the rain


     
  2. skuderjaymes

    skuderjaymes Contextualizer Synthesizer MEMBER

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    Beautiful.
     
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    Your words always bring comfort to my soul!
    Thx. for sharing:)
     
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    My favorite lines were:

    my pulse taking
    even breaths
    my eyes smiling...


    There's a therapeutic texture to this poem. Grace is a powerful virtue that is best digested after real life experiences. There's a brief stint of remorse and borderline shame that quickly gets replaced by a reverent gratitude. The subject of this poem accepts divine intervention and makes no qualms about why God does what he does...how he does it.

    ...this is just my interpretation

    All in all...I enjoyed the intentional ambiguity.

    Great work Kiwanda*
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Beautiful script
     
  6. TotalView

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    James,
    Thank you for always supporting me and my work. I respect your art and your opinion. Knowing you're reading, makes me dig deeper and strive to write better. It doesn't always work but at least I try. (smile)

    Sister Poet Candeesweet,
    Thank you...and for more than just stopping by and leaving words. Sincerely. (smile)

    $$RICH$$,
    Thanks for the inspiration. (smile)
     
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    TotalView Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brother Poet NittyGrit,

    Thank you ever so much. When I see your name attached to my work, I smile before I even open the page. I generally am careful not to fuse the subject of a piece with the poet, but in this instance I am both...so...having typed that...just want you to know your interpretation is spot on. As for the ambiguity...I have no ax to grind. It is what it is. (smile) Thanks for stopping by and leaving words.

    Thanks for typing my given name...it felt like a cyber hug. At least that's my interpretation. (smile)
     
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    you are beautiful.

    continue your journey

    the river floweth
     
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