Poetry Critiques : Feeling with me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by moham, May 12, 2005.

  1. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Life turned softer with days, slowly brighter
    My heart, more than a little lighter. I gave you a tear,
    and received a sincere smile.

    Unfortunately indeed, it has been a while
    …... this image.

    A man, taking genuine interest,
    occasionally pleasantly surprised
    this man convincing me, that love is near,
    reassuring me not to fear

    to let go of the fear.

    Promise, I won’t hurt you. He said
    to follow my heart and read the directions
    My destiny would unfold itself..

    To let go of fear,
    since its paranoia and numbness were to consume me,
    entirely.

    We laughed heartily.
     
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    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I haven't been able to finish many of my scribbles, lately.
    Half-way, I seemed to bump on this dreamers, believers and writers block. :)
    So please do
    ...help a sister out!

    :eek: moham
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what you have scribe has made an impact
    this was nicely done and expressed
    just keep writing it will all come together just don't stop !
     
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