Poetry Critiques : Feelin’ It

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  1. dajiboo

    dajiboo Active Member MEMBER

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    Sweat drenched sheets
    Underneath my feet
    Yes, I'm Feelin' It
    Aching body, sore
    To my very core
    Yes, I'm Feelin’ It
    Tear filled eyes
    A longing between my thighs
    Yes, I'm Feelin’ It

    Black lingerie and stiletto heels
    Couldn't imagine how I feel
    Oh boy, I'm Needin' It
    Face buried in your pillow
    As I let these tears flow
    Oh how, I'm Missin' It
    Hands clenched tight
    Needing you to do me right
    Ooh, I'm Feenin' It

    Salty lips
    and Quiverin' hips
    Hmmm, I'm Tastin' It
    Lyin' here on my hands and knees
    Asking you to come to me, please
    I'm Beggin' It
    Dyin' here with stiletto heels and black lingerie
    Wonderin' why you went away
    Just can't help myself, I'm Feelin' It.

    ***To see inspiration for this poem go to the following link:
    http://www.wak-art.com/erotic3.htm
     
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    I was feelin it too this was well written in scribe
    every line touched the next ...tyte poet

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    yes i agree !!!