Black Poetry : Fear

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  1. witerboy

    witerboy New Member MEMBER

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    Fear
    When it rain it just darkness when it pitch black with no light it just my fear
    When I pray for you to get better but it just nothing I can to do
    I see you running in the torn patches I wait for you to come but it just nothing I can do
    I see you in a glomming way I try to see how are u
    When you run through the house not facing you fear each time you cut yourself your
    blood run through like a red river
    Your heart went to a black cold hearted little girl that what to face her fear
    When it rain the blackness cover the whole body with fear and darkness

    The puddle turn black and your fear are in it
    You see us playing all the time but I thought you just forgot us
    I think you have bad dream and your fear are chasing after you
    When I run after you it stop at the end of the ground and sea
    When you cry I try to cheer you up but it don’t work
    Why are u doing this is it your fear or you hate yourself
    When the time go on it want to stop you fear will chased you all the time
    If you cant face you fear i will face it beside your side with you

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  2. watzinaname

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    What I perceived from this was a willingness to stand beside someone when they have hit rock bottom. What a blessing to have someone in life who will go through the storm with you. Endearing descriptive piece.
     
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    Hello and welcome,
    this was a very clear and nice piece that was laid out before us. thanks for inviting us into your world.
     
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    :wave:
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    Reply to Witerboy

    Witerboy, A true friend you are
    I have searched near and far
    to find someone like you
    stay close to what your choose!

    Seize the Day!
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    the paralyzation of fear
    is one of the worst feelings
    in the world...and so often
    no one can help you...
    it's like a season...
    sometimes we must wait
    patiently for it to pass...
    and once it has, we
    emerge a stronger
    version of ourself...

    Very nice flow!
     
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    :wave: Hello and Welcome Writerboy :wave:

    This is a beautiful tribute to what friendship is really all about!

    There is no doubt that whoever you are writing about ... that you love them dearly.

    I hope that all goes well for you and your friend and i look forward to reading more of you.

    Please make yourself at home, because you are!

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    welcome to destee,com poetic playground
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    Aw, this is such a touching poem. I hope you share more with us.
     
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