Black Poetry : FEAR.........PLEASE READ

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  1. GOD1CUPID

    GOD1CUPID Member MEMBER

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    HOW WOULD YOU FEEL IF YOU LOST LOVE NOT YET REVEAL
    WOULD YOU RIDE OFF IN DARKNESS LIKE PAUL REVERE
    YOU RESIDE BUT INSIDE YOU'RE IN A DISTANT LOCATION
    WHICH IN TURN PRODUCE MAJOR PROBLEMS IN COMMUNICATION
    YOU FEEL SHE STAYED CAUSE LIFE WAS INTORDUCED
    SOULISTCALLY YOU'RE RIVALS, BUT OUTSIDE YOU CALL A TRUCE
    WHEN YOU HURT, NO WOUNDS HEAL BY HER MEDICATION
    SHE SITS BACKS, LAUGHING, NOW YOU'RE ALIENATED
    YOUR INTESTINES ARE TURNING RAPIDLLY LIKE FERRIS WHEELS
    YOUR HEART BURST, AS LIQUID FROM YOUR ARTEIES BEGAN TO SPILL
    YOUR THOUGHTS PRODUCE SO MUCH HATERD AS IT TRAVELS YOUR BRAIN
    YOU'RE IN AN EMOTIONAL RIP TIDE, LOSING CONTROL TO THE OCEAN WAVES
    WOULD YOU RATHER RISK CHEATING OR LEAVING,
    KNOWING WITHOUT HER YOU'LL NEVER BREATHE AGAIN
    I'M DALE EARHARNT WHEN IT COMES TO GETTING IN EMOTIONAL WRECKS
    YOU HAVE NO TERRAIN TO GO TO, BUT YOUR FEELINGS YOU MUST PROTECT
    SO YOU SILIENCED YOUR VOCAL REGION
    FOR HOPE OF THE TWO OF YOU SPEAK AGAIN
    THE YEAR BURNS NOW YOU'RE SEEING YOUR CHILD EVERY OTHER WEEKEND
    AND WITH MONTHLY INSTALLMENTS YOU'RE PAY CHECK'S WEAKING
    GENERALLY SPEAKING, YOU MISSED YOUR NEWBORN TEETHING
    COME 6 MONTH LATER, ANOTHER FATHER YOUR CHILD STARTS SPEAKING
    NOW YOU HAVE ANGER TO THE PERSON YOU SHARED LOVE BETWEEN
    AND SCIENTIFICALLY FUSED TO CREATE ONE BEING
    THIS IS MY FIRST, LAST AND ONLY FEAR
    THAT LOVE GAINED NOR LOVE LOST IS NO LONGER HERE...
     
  2. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was....beautiful
    it's as if i was reading the exact fears that i have
    very insightful
    thank you poet, for allowing me to share in your work
    keep the flow goin :spinstar: :spinstar:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes where we end up is no where near where we thought we'd be. On the outside looking in. This piece felt real. Welcome to destee, I'd like to read more from you.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi :wave:
    And welcome to the "heart mender's home" this was a awesome piece you stepped in with. This is the place where we all share our 'pain, love, joy, sorrow, laughter and all the in-betweens...
    thanks for sharing a part of your heart with us.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello and welcome to destee.com
    very insightful scribe...posed well
    i enjoyed your work...thanks for sharing

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    welcome within again
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome!!!!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the :new: home u found
    welcome from above as i bless u some love
    nice flow well felt too of this twisted tale ...
    u teach the motion :teach: here flow on!
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome Poet... :wave:

    Wow...that is all I can say...
    this peace is so powerful
    and so stirred with emotion
    you can feel the undercurrent
    of "fear and pain"....
    riveting through each stanza...

    Awesome work poet!
     
  8. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome Poet. This is home. Truly the place to release and see how it takes affect. I felt your pain, I wanted to hug your person, but I will have to just send you one of these, :grouphug:

    Everything happens for a reason, though you won't want to hear it now,..you are being prepared for your blessing. Believe that.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa, this is such an amazing piece. Welcome, welcome, welcome. Lookin forward to seein more from ya.
     
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    word....i didn't know where you were going at first
    then it started coming together and at the end i was like wow...
    the second time around it made more sense....great poem
    drop s'more
    one love
    khasm
     
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