Black Poetry : Father

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This happened to sum1 i know so i decided to write a poem on it: ENJOY!!!


    Father, it would be nice to play like all the girls do
    to get out of the house, instead of staying here with you.
    Father, it would be nice to go to school with a skirt
    to cross my feet or fold my legs with out it having to hurt.
    Father, it would be nice to sleep in my room alone
    i do not like the way you sound when you come in and moan.
    Father, it would be nice to know why i am just a girl
    who knows a lot more about sex than most females in this world.
    Father, it would be nice to walk around with out my big tummy
    i'm tired of all this love from you, like i am your little dummy!
    Father, it would be nice if i wasn't so confused
    i feel like i am nothing at all cause i have been used.
    Father, what will i say when i have my little brother
    do i tell him the same story you told me about my mother?





    :spin: *~BE CAREFUL WUT U CHOOSE TO DO IN LIFE BECUZ SUM1 MAYBE FOLLOWIN UR FOOTSTEPS~* :spin:
     
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    Dang.. Is all I can say. It happens too much nowadays and its a shame.. Keep on flowin
     
  3. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THNX. MIZZ UNIQUE
     
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    smh...Yes, unfortunately this does happen, and you certainly told the story well.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling you on dis here well said

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    you unfold the tale so well but it's a sad one

    tight write
     
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    I can't say i enjoyed it..
    because so much sadness surrounds it..
    i can say it was a tight write...
    and I responded emotionally to the work..

    keep flowing
     
  8. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thnx every1 for ur comments and inspiration. I know its a very sad story in a poem and hopefully my friend can seek help but in the meantime all i ask is that ya'll keep her in ur prayers even tho u don't know her but im jus askin... it doesn't hurt to ask rite??? But once again thanx!!! :lips:
     
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    wow...powerful poem...
     
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