Black Poetry : Fate Part 2

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  1. black_soul

    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sorry it took me so long to come out with part two i took a little break from writing but i'm back now hope you enjoy part two don't forget to go back and look at part one.

    Phone ring no one picks up she calls back
    Still no answer getting worried she don’t how to act

    She gets out the bed pacing calls the cell again
    Wondering when this ringing is gonna end

    Maybe is ringer is off that sometimes happens
    Tries to clam down from that scared reaction

    She starts to think about the day before
    How they laid on each other by the fireplace on the floor

    Thinking about the ones in the past and how they don’t compare
    And how they known each other for so long till she showed she cared

    Minutes turned to hours and still no call
    Knowing that’s not like at him at all

    So she stares at the wall worried tear falls down her face
    All she wants is to know if her man is safe

    Getting later and later shes gotta go to work
    Pray to god please don’t let him be hurt

    All the sudden the phone rings his brother on the line
    She hears the sound of his voice and can’t stop crying

    Walks into the hospital getting hard for her to speak
    Going down the hallway staring to lose the feeling in her feet

    Standing in his room she falls to the floor “God its not his time”
    I need him so much cause true love he helped me find

    So she hold his hand thinking him waking up would be great
    Lives up in the air all cause of this thing called “fate”
     
  2. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is some deep stuff lil bro i was feeling this fate part two. cant wait for more of the fate.:smooch:
     
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    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man that was sooooo sad!!! Shoot got me sittin here about to cry, but overall it was a great scribe!
     
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    deep view into fate that leave a sadly taste
    this was heavy yet on point flow on poet...
     
  5. black_soul

    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    FATE PART THREE COMING SOON
     
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    skrybble7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This got that R Kelly feel to it but dealing with fate
    makes it deeper fo sho.
    tyte flo poet.
    One love
     
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    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    DANGGGGGG DAT WAZ REAL GUD
    I WAS PICTURING THE SEANZ...LOL
    I LUVED IT
    I HOPE U CAN MAKE A PART 3 (KOOLAID SMILING)




    BLACKLUV AND BP
     
  8. black_soul

    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nevar, GHETTOAMBITION, skrybble7, $$RICH$$, BlatinaPoet4u thank you all for the love you've shown this poem it means alot thank you.
     
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