Black Poetry : FATE (PART 1)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by black_soul, Jan 11, 2006.

  1. black_soul

    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'M TRYING SOMETHING NEW HERE THIS IS THE FIRST PART TO A LONG POEM HOPE YOU ENJOY I'LL PUT PART TWO UP WHEN I GET IT DONE. HOPE YOU ENJOY GIVE ME SOME FEEDBACK ON THIS.

    Riding home at night with my lady to my side
    Between the both of us ain’t no feelings we hide

    Wanted so long to be with you so glad that we here
    We were great friends but I’m glad we threw away the fear

    So I go to drop you off at home maybe I’ll stay for a while
    Girl let you know I’ll do anything to see that smile

    Hugged up on your moms couch whispering in your ear
    Saying I love you I can tell that you like to hear

    So we get closer turn the lights down low
    No longer do you hear us breathing slow

    Hands on your waist your kissing my neck
    Taking it slow with you don’t want no regrets

    Cause I’m waiting to give you that ring with the fat rock
    So right when my hand goes up your shirt I stop

    You look me in my eyes nobody makes a sound
    Thinking to myself I love this piece that I found

    But it starts to get late and have to head home
    I hug and kiss you good night you tell me that you’ll call me on the phone

    So in the car and around the corner I go
    Thinking about how far this love can grow

    I sitting at the red light I turn up the cd
    Remember in my head tell you that you love me

    Truck comes up does he see me, worried about his pace
    But then I realized it was too late by the look on his face

    Car goes in the air this seat belt don’t work
    Car lands slides five feet people asking is he hurt

    Head bleeding I past out how could this happen to me
    Cell phone rings caller id say “My Baby”

    To be continued..........
     
  2. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm feeling it...

    you have me at that clincher...
    QQ'n... waiting on part II
    I enjoyed it poet...
    can't wait to see the end...

    Flow on Bruh...
     
  3. Tantrum

    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was a hot flow poet
    I like the way you brung this
    Look for part 2-Much Love on this
     
  4. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    get ya flow on and I will be looking for pt 2
     
  5. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    got me wanting more of this please do come with part two please.:kiss1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I'm lovin this wow.....pt.2 please !
     
  7. black_soul

    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love
     
  8. cursed heart

    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Man that was deep!
    Very nice story/poem
     
  9. black_soul

    black_soul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    PART TWO COMING SOON
     
  10. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that was good brother blak_soul!!! Now im anticipating reading ur second poem which i will be doing in another minute or so......:welldone:
     
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