Quiet Poetry Lounge : Fate …Cuts like a two edged sword

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  1. Beautiful_by_me

    Beautiful_by_me Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Fate …Cuts like a two edged sword
    But you gotta watch the wind


    Fate, Like a summer breeze that blew you my way
    Destined to return at the right time.

    So like a gift in a box waiting to be unveiled
    I wait…

    Not because of the happiness such a gift would bring.
    Simply of the pleasures received from the one who cherishes a gift that’s needed.

    So every time I feel the wind blow.
    I place myself inside a box cushioned with abstinence…
    Wrap myself up in patience, and put on self-sacrificing ribbon and tie it into a bow of (“NO, NO’s”) and self-pity.

    To await…

    Fate…Just Like that same summer breeze, that blew you my way, now blows my “NO” bow’s down allowing my pretty ribbon to be sacrificed, while I slowly unwrap myself, and stand outside of that all to be damned box of the “nobody knows…”, No cushion needed.

    Fate cuts like a two edged sword
    … But the wind blows in every direction….

    Written By: Tia Yvette Williams
    10/02
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the swril of wind
    love how u captured this in motion
     
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    this was tight flow head on....
    likes it
     
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    oh, very nice...

    this line just jumped from the page...

    So much truth and yet...a bright ray of hope

    and a Strong Gust of Wind Blowing...through this piece...

    I loved it...
     
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    It cuts both ways, but with the wind, there is hope, yea, I think I could feel the hope here.
     
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    Words abounding from minds fresh and anew. I felt you on this piece. It was well scripted and beautifully versed. You got skills.
    ONE LOVE
     
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    Eisha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :heart: I'm loving this. Nice flow. Very deep. Creates a ripple effect. :heart:
     
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    so true...wonderful poem
    strange how fate can be
    the same as how the wind blows
    wonderful poem
    Peace~N~Love
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a tight poem and this line is magnificent...
     
  10. Beautiful_by_me

    Beautiful_by_me Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you 7thpoet...You thoughts fills me with energy...
     
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