Black Poetry : falsified eye

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  1. THA HOOKUPMAN

    THA HOOKUPMAN Banned MEMBER

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    Confiscate me from my peripheral comfort zone
    Suffer from whiplash as the double-takes control
    Of no more than my thoughts, memory, and entire existence
    Missed it, wished it, wished this would’ve been my last
    Last time this moment, this memory, and you had ever passed
    With the convenience of your inconvenience
    :thinking: :thinking:
    Invading my visual mentality of well being, otherwise known as
    Thought seeing… you through my frame of mind
    Standing on the corner in the third dimension of my eye…
    Would have no directional effect on me, or cause me to
    Miss my train of thought once again, and one more time down the line
    As I continue to reminisce on the old days of way back
    While strolling past the limits of one-way tracks of mind
    Resulting in mental confusion as one path turns into multiple
    Beginnings of loves lost beyond the dead ends of endless lies
    Left to rely on who or what lies behind miss guided signs
    The sands of too much time hazed mirage-filled visions of
    Contentment between us, perfection of the female creation
    Who I thought she was, or were you just a manifestation of conscience
    Deceit within the personification of an oasis left to dust
    Trust was left to rust without the solidity of us

    Rigidity of the rocky times pulled us under and held down
    Down for the countless times to test the true depth of eternity
    Apparently loss of breath left a relationship blurred
    Like walking the thin line bordering unconsciousness
    Living every minute of life by every breath of a walking stick
    Resentment… blinded in near-sided non-focusness
    You were the confusion in high-resolution, subject of my
    False eye bliss… which led me to falsify emotion in motion
    As you walked by through my secondary near sight
    Physical reactions are irrepressible, memories irreplaceable
    My under ability to escape attractions has overwhelmed me
    With interactions magnified by your minds eyes and my thoughts of ill…
    Intensions glared by reflections coupled with a couple in description
    Through years-gone-by-illustrations of a relation-ship
    Etched in stones of contemplation

    An endless recollection within ten seconds as you walk by
    And I catch you in the corner of my falsified eye :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: hookup
     
  2. Khasm13

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    tyte concept poet...
    flow on...
    one love
    khasm
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wondorously Melancholic...

    ...it's funny how blurried sight, or diseases of the eye...
    eventually heal themselves by granting one who didn't
    formerly see clearly...the gift of

    Hindsight

    Insight

    and Foresight...


    and thanks to blurried sight...one can finally see clearly
    and no longer get caught up in "relation"-ships that sink
    because they were built poorly, due to...blurried sight

    Here's to...New Vision :toast:

    Brilliant and insightfully sculpted concept...

    Sometimes we have to ~Close our eyes...in order to "See"~

    Glad to you're back flowing with us again poet...

    My empty cup is being filled today...and overflowing


    Loving you... :wink:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    felt this dip and how u pose'd this here makes me look from da corner stone
    through my eyes
     
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    This was a heavy one my brotha :read:

    filled to the brim with your wisdom

    you are so much like ya soulmate...vibrant and magnetic in TRUTH :read: :)
     
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    All that appears to be...isn't but with a lesson learned there is vision.
    I like your work and enjoyed the read.
     
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    1Greaterthan~I, the beginning of your response sounds familiar... Hookup, what I got from this was how their are varying degrees of clearness that we see, and sometimes the clearest view, the one that we see with the third eye, is the most difficult vision to allow oneself to see. Flow on poet.
     
  8. MADDRAPPER

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    look kid you downed me but I'm gonna be truthful what you have here is coffee shop poetry can't imagine any rapper saying this here not downing your style but mine is different so respect that not even enough rhymes for a microphone feel me?
     
  9. THA HOOKUPMAN

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    im to old to play rapper brotha ..and no hate was thrown at u ...in a battle those who read can have a opinon about who won...if u cant take what i said then dont battle...madd i have notin but love for u brotha so dont take what i said as a diss cause its not... its just my coffee shop poetry opinon ...hookup.. :hammer:
     
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    was not a battle just expression but you bought up a good point wonder can this cat battle? never heard of him on battle boards batling is direct no beating around the bush feel me?