Black Poetry : False Truths...

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  1. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    kind of just flowed off my brain today, hope it makes sense to you...
    peace out!!!!


    False Truths...

    When Justice cries
    My wings are set, my obstacles die
    i destroy false truths amidst the lies

    False Truths...

    in the power driven animals
    and the lesson plan of "happiness" they preach
    intended to blind our souls to what we can reach
    intended to make those with skin color consume demons
    mind bleached (mind soul body, lost in social defeat)
    bent on things unreachable to heaven's door.
    no one want to find a niche in life
    Our world conscience keeps sustaining less and less
    it's less about hope, and more about personal success

    False Truths...

    led me to believe
    that the words i express, and my being was free.
    More sooner than later i could lose all of me.
    And it don't take a psychic to know where our country will be.


    False Truths...

    We're livin
    We're a part of
    False Truths
    And im tired
    of stereotypes and the typical
    im no longer scared to live my life just cuz it's difficult
    so im waitin on the day when justice cries
    i am a soldier wearin freedom rings
    and i sold away the lesser things
    My head will be held high
    wings set to fly
    to be the truth against the lies.

    by Rashawna Wilson
    aka Prizefighter16
     
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    false truth can be deep and painful
    when it's in use from the tongue of
    the betrayal mouth this was well done ...
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well this was tight....and hit some strong points flow on...
     
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    Baby Girl, go tell the truth... expose those lies upsetting you!
     
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    Oh hecka! This is so fulla truth and so real. You're a talented individual.
     
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    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rashawna aka Prizefighter, your piece was very interesting and you had some really good stanzas.

    Like this one
    "False Truths...

    led me to believe
    that the words i express, and my being was free.
    More sooner than later i could lose all of me.
    And it don't take a psychic to know where our country will be. "

    Many believe that their beings are free. Well, it takes A LOT to get to that stage. And if we could ever get to that stage, I don't know. I think that's a philosophical/spiritual question and of a personal matter.
    But I liked the way you posed this part.

    And further more I enjoyed the whole of the last stanza. It contained little pearls of deeper understanding. " False truths we're livin", for example.

    I definitely enjoyed.....

    moham
     
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