Black Poetry : Fallen

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  1. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I struggled for so long with this feeling.
    A feeling of love or was it sheer lust?
    I fell into the abyss when we
    first met.
    You held some exotic power over me,
    it drove me and I soon drowned in your sea.
    "I" ceased to be.
    You became the dominant force "Me."
    At the time it was a star-studded
    relationship dipped in bliss.
    I loved the ups and downs of our bond
    like tomorrow would never come.
    Then I woke up! I realized that all
    fantasy must break.
    Reality pours in and I realize quickly.
    I realize that I am a black man.
    A black man that has fallen so hard for you.
    There's nothing wrong with that, except
    the glitch in my plan.
    I now see that i've fallen for another man.

    ~Copyright
    ~*PropheticNsyght
    "Son of the Daystar" Publishing
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    PropheticNsyght

    This was tight. I felt a turn in the ending coming though. However, not like that.

    Actually, this piece is similar to a few pieces by Manasiac, AngelicSage, and myself. Those pieces were written about that initial attraction and whether a man should beg a woman or not. That discussion in poetic form will be ongoing. :lol:

    Nice drop.

    :thanks: for sharing your life with us.

    :toast:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome scribing here
     
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    :jawdrop: OOOOOOH....WWEEEEEEEE!!!!!! Bring it, Bring it...I just jumped out of my seat...I came back just in time....MY LORD...you put this down, blacked my mind out...can you tell how excited I am...BE BLESSED....
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rich and Monetary, I appreciate your beauty and love.
    Beautiful! You are too much ma! I appreciate your love and constant support. I love your work as well and I'm looking forward to more pieces by you! Stay blessed ma.
     
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    Yes, this did take a turn I did not see coming, I agree with money on that. The flow was on point regarding the love or lust question.
     
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    I hear the wheeles turning in ya head and you cooking up some ish 4 us! Thanks 4 this read poet. :read:
     
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