Quiet Poetry Lounge : Fall

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by candeesweet, Aug 18, 2011.

  1. candeesweet

    candeesweet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Itis about tht time to see the view​
    Steam turning to heat then ending up chill @ night​
    Releasing the frangrances one last time into the air​
    Wondering when will b the last time for growth​
    Between You and I​
    The next lite shines as bright in those yellows and reds​
    But fall as a spread for a crumblin bread​
    Feed the found i on the perfection nature makes​

    The fall is about be corroused in withstanding​
    The burial to come of lite white lace hard to touch​
    Everyplace will be traced the next time warmth touches the air​
    The past will come to be seen for what it is always been​
    Between You and I​
    We fall into this together but yet love one more then another​
    Tht cold place sinks in as yellows and reds go unseen​
    While the blooms are soon to come soon frangrences spring up right in the air​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    This work really engages all the senses...the colors, the temperatures, the tastes...its very descriptive of Fall. I feel as if I entered the private world between "You and I/Him"..uninvited....it just pulled me in.

    Just a phenomenal write. Im listening.
     
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    Thanks For listening and posting great comments!
    It All Comes 2gether with yall in mind!
     
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    Sister Poet candeesweet,

    Wonderful read. This piece is alive and the images leap from the page. It has beautiful color (those yellows and reds of yours) and a lovely fragrance, turning "fall" into fall. Its cryptic language is a delight to try to decipher...but in the end...it doesn't matter what it means, it made me feel. Great piece. Thanks for sharing. (smile)
     
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    My favorite time of the year, and Wow!--This is beautiful to read because it makes me think about peaceful thoughts of peaceful times I experienced in the past during this season.
     
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