Black Poetry : Fall Into Me

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  1. sweet apple*pie

    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I drop bread crumbs to my heart

    But will you follow?

    Or simply eat of my bread and run…

    Your home is a lonely one

    The lights are on

    But the door is locked

    I sit outside of you and knock

    Rain pouring, but answer you not

    For lonely’s love is the one you’ve sought

    For a long time now…

    It’s become a part of you…..

    …..I see through the shadows of you

    I’ve observed your open plains and grooves

    I’ve watched how you move….

    Yes, I’ve watched how you move

    The fluidity of your motions

    You have nothing to prove

    For your footprint speaks loudly

    And it’s where ever I go…

    Written on the tablet of my heart

    Between my rib and my soul….

    I watch from the shadows…

    As the stones in you glow

    Setting my heart afire

    As the milky waves flow..

    And flow and flow….

    Off a cliff, you pretend not to know

    Into the waters of me..

    Magical pools of mystery

    That you are curious to see…

    Why do you fear thee?

    Let go of Lonely’s hand

    And fall into me​
     
  2. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    um um um... i don't know which line(s) stood out the most.
    your initial approaches and imagery are on time with beginners like "... i drop " , "...i sit ", "... i see " and "... i watch", very clear that you feel like you are the company my dude needs and who can resist a sexy spiritual poetess??? Like Keith Sweat begged, ~ nobody ~
     
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    well

    i'm following crumbs
    to take the whole loaf
    i can see you too
    and your vision of hope
    just like you
    barack the vote
    you command respect Queen
    you ain't no joke

    shadows come to the light
    illuminate the night
    to behold your sight
    yes
    it all feels right

    no fear of thee
    who wouldn't
    want to say
    yea
    that's a Queen
    next to me
    treating you like royalty
    girl get out that rain
    my heart will cover you
    like a canopy
    treating you with
    love and respect
    like you're family
     
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    I loved the flow of the orginal drop. :welldone: my sister. and i also love the flowback :welldone: my brother
     
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    I will follow wherever you wish to lead
    like a moth drawn to a flame
    I wish to be with you every second
    your love is what sustains my life
    Lonliness is a slow death
    but you offer me life & love beyond my dreams
    and now I will take hold of your hand
    as we drift off to our promised land.
     
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    a warm and tender invitation...

    I enjoyed this beautifully entitled expression!



    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    Clyde C Coger Jr going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    In the Spirit of Sankofa and Sincerity!




    sweet apple*pie,

    These words you have written are full of sincerity, full of loyalty, full of emotion/passion, of someone well beyond your years, and quite remarkable, to say the least. It is amazing that you continue to define what real love is; providing a window to your soul for all to see, if they can only but read.

    As I have said before, the work of a true poet/poetess causes the seasoned romantic, such as myself, to simply report and reflect deep affection toward its author(s). So, thanks but no thanks to the mesmerizing impact, like a magnet one is drawn inside, even against all will and resistance. Again, pardon the absence which is replaced with pondering, you have said more than enough to this reader (part 3 is not necessary and explains absence).

     
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    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    j'hiah, thank you sweetie...yes, this flo felt personal, I clutched it to myself. Sometimes written word, is better than spoken. beggin' like Keith Sweat....boy you a mess! LOL

    Street...your so kind and nice to me, you words envelope my heart, thank you friend...
     
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    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you sweet beautiful poet. Thank you so much for stopping by.


    written with love, thank you B...lonliness truly is a slow death, but if one would open their heart to me, it would not have to be.
     
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    There are those who we feel that if they would just open up a tad, the possibility of a wonderful relationship could happen. Tenderly scribed poetess.
     
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