Black Poetry : Fade away

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  1. witerboy

    witerboy New Member MEMBER

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    fade away

    When i look at the mirror i want to fade away
    The memories the thing i see fade away
    I just see darkness and my wash gray world of sadness and death
    When i am in my wash gray world it just my fear and my darkness and sadness
    when i want to wake up from this i just fade away

    I see my self in the mirror it just my reflection sad boy
    THE moon shine bright in the sky casting reflection of me in pond where i want to fade away
    When the mirror crackes it take pice by pice of me and i fade away for good
    :new:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt one so fade in the myth but unto hope
    da reflection reveils as u open eyes to da light
    nice write
     
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    very heartfelt piece...
    very touching as your emotions flow
    rememeber its always a new day...:wink:

    Peace unto you
    Angel
     
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    Such a pretty piece. Just remember, you are a priceless creation. Much love.
     
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    Witerboy

    Here...you need a hug. :grouphug:

    Things will get better.

    :thanks: for sharing your feelings with us.

    :toast:
     
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    Nice drop. Look at the reflection. Painted glass like a mirror of water reflects what you should see. Looking into a mirror, what do you you see. It's a backwards appearance you can renew.

    Is it true, no a backwards view. Looking in the mirror is about how you see, things not how your seen.

    Self reflection is always a good way to gain perspective. Keep flowing I liked this.
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice piece
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey writer welcome home :wave:

    I know what its like to jus want to disappear :grouphug:
    glad you felt good enuff to share :)
     
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    very heartfelt, and beautiful
    Brotha, i can undastand the feelings of wantin to fade away
    but i learned to realize that i can never lose myself
    as an african american woman
    no matta how many times the pieces of me seem to be hidden

    i hope you neva lose yourself
    i can see how beautiful your soul is now

    keep the flow goin
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wanting to just disappear because what you see is just too much to fathom. Many have felt similiarly, and feel your words, for this was a very emotive piece. This too shall pass and you will see a brighter day.
     
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