Black Poetry : fade away

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MORE, Jul 3, 2003.

  1. MORE

    MORE Banned MEMBER

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    its all becoming fuzzy now
    the memories somehow fade
    i grab them to hold onto
    those happy days

    and squint my eyes
    to see your face
    formed shadows around the rim
    smell of you skin , melatonin

    the ghost of me creepin
    up and down your stairs
    canvassing every room and floor
    'member how it felt to be there
    give me more....

    and now i hear african drums
    no, that's the way your heartbeats
    against my ear, as i held u dear
    while u were fast asleep.

    and your smile flashed like the sun
    radiant with all its glow
    just memories now, that's killing me
    painfully and slow

    and hear your voice
    call my name like echoes
    thru mountain walls
    cannot hide from the emptyness
    at all, at all......

    and this heavyness in my chest
    has been familiar to me
    but can never get used to
    the silent tears washed down my cheeks

    and inside i call u love
    to please come home this time
    i've prepared a place safe for you
    in my heart, soul and mind.......
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this ALOT...very beautiful piece girl...
     
  3. Khasm13

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    this is so tyte...

    "and this heavyness in my chest
    has been familiar to me
    but can never get used to
    the silent tears washed down my cheeks"

    familiar but can't get used to...i love the contrast
    peace
    khasm
     
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    MORE MORE MORE...

    TOOK SKELTONS OUT OF MY CLOSET, AND DANCED WITH THEM. VERY NICE
     
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    this is wonderfull....yes i like it tooooo...nice
    Peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sistah MORE.......dis was too sweet
    u pose a flow gentle and sweet
    let ya pen continue
     
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    This was beautiful and very emotive!
     
  8. Loveall20

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    One word,
    beatuiful.
     
  9. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi MORE,

    This is a beautifully written piece!! Very emotional.

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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