Black Poetry : Faces (jus reamblin)

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Faces (jus ramblin)

    one day i was outside...breathing...
    when i came across a face that
    i would splash playfully
    upon the pages of my poetry book...

    its moods would vary....
    eys red...face sliding,flabby....
    age pulling on cheeks.....

    i would wonder at an old man's grumpiness...
    his happiness disolving slowly as the years
    snatch his youth away...

    my arms unfolded...
    i floated...
    why are my writings sooooo deeppppp....
    did He* bless me on His* own personal Zion
    while i was in heaven?

    i don't know....
    maybe someday i will make people
    think about the why the old man is sooooo grumpy...
    when wisdom is suppose to cover his head.....

    copywrite 2004, all rights reserved
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    someday somehow someway it will all come out
    this was very nicely done and crafted
     
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    very nicely posed
     
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    Free flowing thoughts, you took us along with you in the vision, nice one.
     
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    you are deep sister
    love reading you:)
    much love
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    this line was classic... :toast:

    Girl...I just love your flow so much...

    With your "grown" self...(j/k)

    You know I love you! :grouphug: :D
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like I like I actually take photos of people and write what I think they're feeling I like this :hot: :hot:
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love yall..
    :heart: :kiss:
    -story
     
  9. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :)

    I liked this story...I could see that old grumpy man like he was right churr..lol
    :wink:
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks nita, alwayz got my back....
    :kiss:
    -story
     
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