Black Poetry : Eyes

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Manchid, Apr 20, 2004.

  1. Manchid

    Manchid Member MEMBER

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    As I stare into your eyes my
    feelings are undefined. I see
    your hearts emptiness begging
    and wanting loves sweet caress.
    See your dark tender eyes invite
    me to gently kiss your sweet lips
    down to your curvaceous hips.
    Those eyes hypnotizes me to pour
    out my heart to you so you can
    see me as I see you beautiful.
    Unaware of my feelings I fall into
    your puddle likes eyes swimming in
    the gentle rivers of your soul. I
    begin to lose control. Unaware of
    outside interferences I matriculate
    deeper into your soul where reality
    ends and the unreal begins. You see
    I find places in you where no man
    has touched leaving you saved and
    unscaved by love’s cruels leaving
    me enslaved. Enslaved by your eyes
    in which I begin to rely on for comfort.
    This I can’t deny. My mind races with
    thoughts of you and me together.
    But I keep my thoughts to myself
    unsure of your hearts intent.
    Your eyes those hypnotic eyes I realize
    that your eyes will lead to my demise.
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    In the streets I can greet ya, about
    blunts I teach ya. Inhale deep like t
    he words of my breath. I never sleep,
    cause sleep is the cousin of death.
     
  2. Obscure

    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    this **** was was mad tight.
    basic format.
    but the diction was great.
    i liked the metaphors and similies in there.
    nice drop.
    i would quote but im in a hurry.
    most of the piece was a quotable man
    i really like this
    respect.
    and welcome to the board eventhouh im new too. lol

    WuN...
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    within da eyes of golden pearls
    sweet flowin tyte to da core
    flip out some more !!!
     
  4. Dior Robynsonne

    Dior Robynsonne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The eyes are the windows to the soul. Beautiful.
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a tight scribe
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Something about the depth of where those eyes can take you, and this takes us on a wonderfully posed poetic trip.
     
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