Black Poetry : EYES WIDE SHUT

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  1. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I gave you my heart, when I should have just shared it with you.
    Instead of having "one", you now have "two" hearts...and I have none.

    My mind went away cause I had nothing to say. My voice always echoes
    in vain.
    I fought hard for my pride, still you pushed it aside...I have only myself to
    blame.

    Than I gave you not half...but the whole of my soul, when I should have kept
    half for a spare.
    But...it's gone now...you win, there's not a thing I can do...but start my life
    over again.

    Unchain my heart and return my soul...please let me start over anew.
    But remember the words that I've always said...
    ...I'll go to my GRAVE...Loving you !!

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  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow this is very emotional
    feelin ya here
    nice drop.....Angel
     
  3. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh my Queen!!!!!!!!!!!

    What a beautifully melancholy scribe, so sad when love is given and taken for granted.
    But it's a lesson that you will never have to repeat...Once burned twice shy!
    Sorry for the guy who lost you...now go on and start that new life! GOD HAS SOMETHING
    WONDERFUL WAITING FOR YOU!

    Blessings on your house!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was awesome scribing love the way u did it
     
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    kenyatta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm so glad you weren't thinking about me when you wrote that, cause obviously your eyes were not only wide shut, but open closed. In the movie Waiting to Exhale, which I liked, I came to the divine conclusion that no woman should be waiting to exhale if they are careful about What They Inhale. Just Food For Thought
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I felt your heart being walked on reading this...emotionally put.
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that [email protected] thing called love. i'm sure your eyes will be open from now on
     
  8. Khasm13

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    i felt da emotions on this piece.....wow
    love can definately put da blinders on....for a sec ;)
    very nice
    one love
    khasm
     
  9. cojamalik

    cojamalik Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It is very clear that your eyes are wide open. So keep your eyes open and continue to help others see :peace: :peace:
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yo, I was feelin this....this was madd fire......I was sittin' here like " Word, sista here is a genius."......this was a nice flow....and I meant everything I said.....I've never read you before but I had to say I will be lookin' for more of you on the board.
     
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