Black Poetry : ~Eyes of Hope~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beyond what i may
    see...
    they say hope is somewhere beyond the sea,
    and it roams free...
    i hold my breath and close
    my eyes...
    and dream to a time, when one day
    hope will be mine...
    but even a fool...
    knows, dreams doesn't come
    true...
    and by the day, my blood
    grows more cold...
    dying, i start to neglect my
    crying soul...
    spitting on church grounds
    asking what am i here for...
    writing atheistic scriptures...
    beginning with, "dear mr. preacher"
    a dead rebel, i am
    who walks a suicidal
    path...
    anxiously waiting on death, to ask for her
    last dance...
    joined by hands...
    staring over her shoulders into the promising eyes of
    hope..

    another keystyle i just did. Got kinda blank at the end didnt know how to finish it off really, so i just left it like that.

    one luv
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And well done , well done!!!!!!!!!!!

    I can see the muse has visited you and sat upon your shoulder, as you gain confidence in your style you will get much bolder. Doubt not that every word you formed is where it ought to be... for there is not a grade or pecking order on this "Learning Tree"


    Blessings On Ya HOuse!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice flow i feel dis one
     
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    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi, MInd-$oul, :wave:

    Wonderful sense of imagery. Great flow. I really like your poem. I am glad you shared this one!

    Bye,

    Sierra :)
     
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