Black Poetry : eyeplaythabakground

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by hi-wa, Oct 30, 2002.

  1. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sitting somewhere, takin it all in
    world music in the background, coffee beans grabbing my nose
    flares of matches and lighters mount the foreground
    briefcases line the floor, joining wingtips and slingbacks
    a collage of muttered sounds alleviates the room
    as chased liquor slides down my throat
    my words oscillate in the air, so i close my
    mouth and let my mind float
    tomorrow's nine2five never enters my thoughtprocess
    and i remain blind to the fact that my days start and end
    at darkthirty, but i'm enjoying these sublimainal messages i'm receivin this e'nin
    mentally captivated by the actions takin place,
    my mind's pen begins to roam
    finding a home on the steeno pad, thoughts run wild
    tho my attitude is mild, my soul is an infant to this turf
    but ambition grabs the earth and presses it firmly to my ballpoint
    forwards me to euphoric zones
    exploring infinite possibilities within reach,
    but untouchable with my fingertips.........i lose grip
    and focus back to the poet in the distance
    for an instant i think we should trade places
    u know, i take the microphone and moan about things
    for a minute
    but naw, i'm alright. i'll refrain and remain
    behind the scenes with mine.........


    (to be continued..........)
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hi-wa

    You paint quite a picture poet!!!

    Reas
     
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    this took my back to NYC...ahhh...can't wait to read the continuation!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    more more more !!! dis was sweet and u laid it to canvas
     
  5. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx people for the read. always nice to read replies.
    keep readin me. the continuation is postin soon.



    bkul/bez/bu
    hw
     
  6. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    glad u feelin. keep comin back...

    bkul/bez/bu
     
  7. elayne.

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    i read this yesterday & didn't get the
    chance to reply... soooo...

    you be behind the scene wit yours, huh?
    mmm hmmm... this was nice. Very nice!

    itsallLove, chile. (i guess!) :lol:

    elayne.
     
  8. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yo this was deep man
    on some spiritual stuff man

    deep i felt this here
    i had this feeling too poet
    so you know i'm feeling ya man
    peace

    DSS
     
  9. wildflower7

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    yeah, this is real life stuff!
    anxiously awaiting the rest... -7 :spinstar:
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hi-wa...

    Kewl read!!!

    Dug!!!

    :peace:
    GQ