Black Poetry : Explanation of a Dream

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  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm feeling lonely.
    What I lack in age,
    I make up in understanding.
    I’m a young man trying to find.
    His way in a world he doesn’t understand.

    They tell me to follow the rules and law,
    but it knocks me with its hand.

    They tell me to live a certain way,
    but everyone is breaking the rules.

    They wrote the book, my future they took.
    Tell me who is the fool.

    They say I’m going to fall by my ways.
    I want to be justified.

    I’m trying to right.
    It’s a life long fight.
    It leaves me with a bruise.

    They love me when I’m good
    and hate me when I’m bad.

    Chastise me with penalties,
    payment due.
    Many things to keep me sad.

    I don’t want them to know
    how much they hurt me.

    So I bury it deep inside.
    It wears away at my very day,
    and eats me up inside.

    When I’m tired I want to look that way,
    when I am happy I want it to show.

    I’m a young man in this world of crime.
    I just don’t understand sometimes.

    Looking around for something to do
    to take the edge off things.

    I pack a bag.
    Sneak out the house,
    and run away from you.

    I have a plan.
    I think I do.

    To make it better yet.
    I run outside nowhere to go.
    I haven’t figured this thing out yet.

    Why must I feel I must be twice
    as good as the man, who holds me down?

    To prove my worth.
    To make it on this racist earth.
    With blood spilled all on this land.

    Strike out in anger,
    at the nearest thing.
    That means I don’t get along with you.

    My crime commit against the one closet to me.
    I don’t care I feel like having a fit.

    I won’t apologize.
    I can’t.
    I won’t, but I know
    you’re not the reason I’m down.

    I must find direction, some peace in life.
    Before the play is over or I quit.

    I work all day, and I
    work all night too.
    Still I have nothing to show.

    Haven’t worked out what it takes to make it.
    Searching for something new to know.

    Walk like a lion.
    Charge at my pray,
    the truth should be spoke at all times.

    The world is hardened in its ways.
    My heart is hardening too.

    What is your name, you sooth my pain.
    Tell me I want to know.

    I do have a few things
    to say and things to do.

    I didn’t move up to be respected;
    I have some place to go.

    I moved up to change my fate.
    So don’t put me down,
    call me a sell now,
    and attack just what I got.

    Don’t be mad.
    I did what you didn’t expect.
    No, I’m not done just yet.

    With the world I find.
    How much wasted time.
    I will tell you when I’m done.

    I’ll write a book to let
    you have a look, of just
    what I’ve been through.
     
  2. Nisa

    Nisa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :spinstar: :spinstar: that was trulyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy amazinggggggggggggggggggggggggg *snaps fingers in approval*
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When we're constantly in the midst of confusion, anger, violence, all types of mayhem, we tend to lash out, and sometimes at the very ones we shouldn't take our anger out on. It always leaves an unfinished chapter in our lives. Flow on brotha, keep working our minds with words.
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh hodee bear :(

    WoW...

    we dont often get the pleasure of reading some of your writings

    it reminds me of the night you shared all that writing wif me in chat :)

    I love your poetic spirit brotha hodee bear
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice a deep thought scribe enjoyed it....Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man u took it there wit awesome heads up
    dreamin .........love the flow bruh !
     
  7. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hodee,
    this was very touching.
    The way you expressed the doubts, the struggles, the frustrations...and the doubts...very pure.
    Reading between the lines I could sense there was more..much more.

    enjoyed your thread.
    :heart: moham
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mmmm...my brother
    these words reach deep
    within those dark places of the heart
    in the shadows where all our sorrows are tucked
    the struggles and pain...all boxed up

    and forces one to see those same experiences
    within themselves...

    this was a very touching and deeply introspective piece
    when the world has pushed you down and still yet you rise...
    You have a story to tell...
    You have a story to tell...

    Awesome work my brother!
    *Applause*
     
  9. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As this world hardens it's twice as hard 2 keep your heart from following suit, but we must remain steadfast.

    Completely feeling this, bro.

    Peace.
     
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