Black Poetry : exotic fruit (inspired by that peaach poem)

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  1. Sha'iyn

    Sha'iyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's no use man
    My life is like a produce stand
    and
    I stay around fruit loops like Toucan Sam
    This gurl named Strawberry jams when the DJ scratches
    Her name is the wrong fruit it should be Melon Patches
    I don't mean to be nasty just real not fake
    What you doin' with them Casabas and Grapes
    that basket on your head
    is complimenting my dreads
    If she feeds the king fruit
    i'll do whatever SHE says
    them legs like Bananas hips like Pears
    Derrier like Apples and Peaches I swear
    I'll marry you if you dared to let me peel
    your ripened Florida Orange with a Lemon-Lime build
    They say the darker the skin
    the sweeter the Plum
    The better she grows
    the brighter the sun
    I might have a son
    a daughter or somethin'
    Canteloupe backside and I ain't frontin'
    Your tush is proper
    you're a daughter of Cush
    i'm the brotha to pick you
    off of that Berry bush
    Kisses like Cherry trees
    they comin' in twos
    filled with Shuga and nectar
    and I Love You's
    That Kiwi's a mystery
    so soft, so sweet
    I like drinking from Coconuts
    and chewing a piece
    Your my tropical goddess
    no woman comes before you
    honest and cute remind me of some exotic fruit:tongue3:

    Sha'iyn Abdul Quwdus
    BrownShugaShane
     
  2. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    exotic this was loved it.......
     
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    Kevin Ervin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You are talented... Self-expression (free of insecurity to do so) is God talent...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dat's what i'm talking bout fruits that make u go Ummmmm!!!!
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sha'iyn:
    I am soooo feeln' this. Talk about too cute.
    Your creativity is astounding.

    Much Luv
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Talk about sweetening the poetic taste buds. The joy you have for composing shines through, poet.
     
  7. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yo i'm feeling this artful piece

    and i loved this line

    Her name is the wrong fruit it should be Melon Patches


    lol

    this piece was on
     
  8. BlackVision

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    Enjoyed the creativity of it all. Very refreshing and original. The format enhanced the piece as everything was presented well and in a tasteful manner (pun intended lol).
     
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