Black Poetry : exiled

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    ~ Exiled​


    He espoused a pride in heritage and land
    A toughness of love for family and man
    He spoke to the wrongness of societal norms
    Behavior whose stench causes others alarm
    Man’s inhumanity to man…yes, he challenged that, too
    Got caught up in the system because of his views

    ‘Twas exiled to a place in a far distant land
    Marooned. Absconded. Among thistles and sands
    A land time forgot…as it did not develop forward
    Its scenery wasn’t lush but harsh…morbid

    In the midst of this mecca of barbs and thorns
    Where the weather was dreary. The landscape…forlorn
    And all that was hoped for was never to be
    Made himself at home. Content…in his misery

    His accusers were loud. They stood quite tall
    Went spouting their filth to all who did call
    Though the accusations were false, it stirred, in some
    That “Justice for all” isn’t meant for everyone

    When he heard of their (lies), he made his way home
    Desperate. Despair-filled. From his time all alone
    But tomorrow brought strength to time-weary bones
    A travel-birthed desire to right what was wrong

    When, alas, he confronted that spiteful few
    He gave credence to right…but did what he had to
     
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    man this was full of depth and deep , i really loved this piece
     
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    very nice.. I love the language and the tempo.
     
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    *sigh* this piece left such a melancholy vibe in my spirit
    but a well written thought provoking piece nonetheless my brotha :)
    Thank you! :read:
    Props to the Poet :)
     
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    Hey Baller, how you be?

    Reading some pieces are like snuggling up with a good book.
    An entire intriguing story nicely penned in few words.

    You are so good at what you do!


    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:dance:
     
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    loved the imagery, the choice of words, and the classy way you left the ending open. that's what poetry is supposed to be--as opposed to prose--leave it up to the reader to complete the picture. who is the exiled? who are the accusers? is this within a small group of peers? or a village? or an ousted leader? or is it an idea rather than a person?

    excellent work!
     
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    THANKS...for reading

    the river floweth
     
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