Black Poetry : EXCUSES

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  1. EbonyQueen06

    EbonyQueen06 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Jobless, broke, and have three kids,
    I just have my ciggerates and bottle of jin
    Puffing and drinkin my problems away,
    But know when I'm sobber my problems will still be the same
    Nothin I can do but stay high and liqored up
    Because in da white man's world
    They won't hire a ***** wit a GED
    I'm just a worthless nigg
    Who gets money from its moms
    And lives off foodstamps and government cheese
    My life's already ****** up at the age of 23
    Most likely I'll be dead when my youngest daughter turns 3
    My kids need someonet to love and a male role model
    But I can't be that in luv wit the bottle
    And livin in Section 8 apartments
    Wana sign up for the Army
    And be all I can be
    But I'll fail the piss test
    I'll guess I'll never be the best
    I'm just one of those mens
    ****** rap about in their rap songs
    Jobless, broke, and lives off smoking weed
     
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    :ref: WHOA!!!! Time Out​

    The battle between good and evil :yesno: is always a tough one but to give up is to not try :teach:
    this is such a good poem though and the sorrow inside is deep and the pain is real. Keep your pen stroking poet...... :huh:
     
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    very heavy flow ....release it
    tight drop indeed



    come join us in voice chat as well
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    Peace
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    this was raw...but real
    this flow was tyte...

    Great read poet!
     
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    Powerful write of everyday life.
     
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    don't let your excuses make or break you. the obstacles that you speak of were set in your path with the help of the devil. just as sure as jesus walks with you the devil is always two steps behind ******* things up. think about the rose that grew from concrete....tupac. i see that you are talented in your flow. think outside the box. sure the odds are against you, that just means the accomplishment will be even sweeter. but first you have to try. i wish you luck
     
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    thank-u everybody I really apreciate the love once again
     
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    Man this is like a song of life, nice drop
     
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