Black Poetry : Excuse Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by HighEmme, Dec 24, 2003.

  1. HighEmme

    HighEmme Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I saw him
    just a glimpse caught him
    as soon as he came through the door
    i looked at him
    then looked away
    trying to ignore
    his pretty boy smile
    and his thugged out style
    ****, it's been a while
    since i saw someone that made me stare
    so hard that i know he can feel it
    but i don't even care
    if he sees me lookin
    cause i got plans to book him
    i want him on my team
    even if it means
    me
    approaching
    him

    "Excuse me
    Can I talk to you?
    My intentions aren't to be rude
    but your aura exudes
    something intriguing
    which played a part in leading
    me over here.
    I just want a moment of your time
    invite your soul to dance with mine
    over mental stimulus and wine
    as my eyes undress your mind
    and fondle the lines
    that your lips release
    mount your thoughts and ride them
    like rythmic beats
    conversation is orginal
    so no repeats
    Is this too deep?
    I'm feeling like
    a mental whore
    because it's only the first encounter
    and I want you to explore
    the deepest parts of my mind
    while our souls intertwine
    and make love for a lifetime
    over mental stimulus and wine."
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    your Excused
    but i notice u too
    and this feeling
    of me and u
    my soul took ya hand
    slowly as we dance
    be let me say
    u took my heart
    as u left after dark
    so until da next dance
    in my mental i'll
    caress u again

    Tyte love this flow wow i had to say it
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    likes this drop
    tight scribe... :angel1:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think we've all been there, when someone just captures our eyes. Nice write.
     
  5. HighEmme

    HighEmme Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What's up y'all? Thanks for the love...been away for a minute and now I'm back. Glad somebody was feelin me. You see people that you think are attractive on the daily, but every now and then there's one that makes you stop and stare and say 'd*mn'. This was that one.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice approach..liking this flow
    Peace
    Blue
     
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