Black Poetry : excited about the ocean

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  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    excited about the ocean
    you asked me to share your life with you
    as we looked out over the ocean
    you promised me a comfortable life
    and then you asked me to be your wife
    you have held true to both things
    i am your wife and my life is quite comfortable

    excited about the ocean
    we made love in the clear blue water of the virgin islands
    ran from the military police at the dominican republic
    half naked and shook with nervous laughter
    i cried at my sisters wedding in st. thomas
    you couldn't be there, you had finals to take
    you were working on your MBA
    but i knew you thought of me
    as i looked out upon the ocean

    excited about the ocean
    we took our 1 and 2 year olds to the gentle waters of Glen Island
    watched them play in the sand
    studied books, made picnics
    focused on our future
    soon after we bought a house
    you asked me if i was with you
    did i have your back
    i said yes as we looked out upon the ocean

    storms came
    no marriage is perfect
    i spent many summer days on the jersey shore alone
    watched our sons play
    i had to escape in anger
    took out my aggression in body piercings
    tattoos
    fights, flight, harsh words
    corn rows
    things got physical, but we never stopped loving

    i turned to God
    i asked him to heal us
    no family can do these things alone
    i heard the answer to my prayers
    in the quiet sound
    of waves lapping gently on the shore
    one cold winter evening while i was alone in thought

    God picked us up
    whispered in my ear and we found one another again
    we sit side by side in church
    we quietly smile because we found the answer
    and then just the other day
    i found my dream house
    it sits along the ocean shore
    it faces a lighthouse
    i told you about it
    you said...let's go look

    we're both excited about the ocean
     
  2. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh wow.....this was a beautiful piece:) sooo real and .....i do elieve this ranks up there with your best
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh i was excited readin this scribe
    love the flow..as always
    thanks for sharin
    Peace
    Angel
     
  4. MrAdams

    MrAdams Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    re: hi

    good-evening redlady


    nice of you to post a new piece...


    glad to see that you and your hubby have given yourself to the lord... a christian couple in love is a beautiful thing, as all marriages have ups and downs...


    seems like the brother has awaken and realize that without god, his life would be uncomplete...

    do continue to serve the man above and he will look over your family, etc...


    sincerely,
    c.t.adams-///
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's said that in God there is the answer..this is a beautiful scribe.
     
  6. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    swt - thank you for replying and following my work!
    mzblkangel - thanks for the feedback
    mr. africa - no doubt...you gotta take that walk...every marriage does
    watzinaname - thank you!
     
  7. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :toast: heres to

    growin' old and grey and still
    "excited about the ocean" together :)

    Nice peace!

    feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco :heart:
     
  8. verse

    verse Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    may your waterfront dreams come true. tight piece.
     
  9. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    cocobutter - thanks for the drop
    verse - i hope so...thank you.
     
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    oh my goodness
    this flow just touch my heart
    i am all wrapped
    up in this
    nice oh so nice
    lovely
    Peace
    Blue :heart:
     
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