Black Poetry : Eviction

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  1. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your words
    so deceiving.
    You were able
    to convince me
    that you cared.
    But if it wasn't
    for my own vision
    I would have never
    known why you were here.
    See I have learned to
    read
    your body and to
    understand what your
    words would never say.
    You may have wanted me
    once but that was once upon
    a day.
    See your eyes hold so much but you hold it back from
    me.
    And when you touch me. It's like there is somewhere or someone with whom
    you'd rather be.
    And it doesn't even hurt anymore.
    Because I know what is true.
    So instead of trying to convince me you want to stay maybe it's
    time you were true to you.
    Face up to the fact that it's over
    and just let it be.
    And after you are done all that.
    Pack Your bags and leave.
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyme to go out wit da old
    in wit da new here i come
    to sho u da true love
    a heart of compassion
    and eyes of honor
    where u can vision the truth
    and the reason of my beings
    i come in respect
    to treasure ya worth
    and sho u every touch
    is of u not da myth of
    another mental play
    open da door .....

    love this reality check
     
  3. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$Rich$$
    Well you are welcome
    in to my heart
    and home.
    No one really wants
    to be alone.
    Respect and cherish
    all things I need.
    And believe me when
    I say with me you will
    be well pleased.
    So if you are ready to
    be the one for me.
    Come on over and get your keys.


    Hey You know I always welcome your feedback
    thanks.
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked the direct quality to this, and even with the pain, recognizing the need to move on. I guess you need to give Rich a copy of those house keys right? LOL
     
  5. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dang

    This was nice...I love the honesty and the creativeness this poem displayed.
    Thanks
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was nicley posed
    flow on
     
  7. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a great poem of courage and strength, sister. Flow on.
     
  8. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks everyone for the feedback. And You are right Watz.LOL. :lol:
    I am glad that you all enjoyed it.

    Smooches!!!! :wave:
     
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