Black Poetry : Everyone, Everybody, and Everything

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by HODEE, Sep 21, 2004.

  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    They are taking
    advantage of us all.
    Bring in the brutal issues.
    Stress lacking any
    mark of human refinement.

    Unfeeling physical acts of cruelty.
    Beastly applied to this and that.
    This wide struggle surrounds
    us link a neck ring.
    Killing those that can not bear.


    Taking all into its lair.

    Its monstrous grip.
    Law can’t relinquish.
    Can they, but they chose.

    Not to react.

    Can you say you didn’t
    add to the problem.
    Everybody’s guilty.
    If you knew of the act.

    You’ve heard the stories.
    Know the lines.
    Staying on the out-skirts
    until it’s your time.

    Choke slowly those who make this world.
    A place unlike it could.
    Doing us because you think it’s funny.
    While you’re bought cronies
    close-by watching stood.

    Take this as my rally forward.
    To expose and change things.
    I have broken loose from that ring.

    Those working against the masses.
    Don’t you cry now my darling,
    my brother your time on the
    Out-skirts have come to past?
     
  2. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oooooohhhhh I like this one pa. Keep the fire coming!!!
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What I felt from this piece, was that you're tired of the whole concept of live and let live, sounds like you're ready for a revolution poet.
     
  4. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :thanks: Thank you Watz.

    This is the title of my book.

    I signed a contract today.
    This poem is going up front. :wink:
    From there I believe I can
    fuel a thought or two. :geek:

    Thank you PropheticNsyght for your read.
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Really? Wow...Congratulations Hodee!!!! How are you feeling about this? I mean, are you pinching yourself to assure that it's real, or what? This is wonderful.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was a grant love it flow head on ..........
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    everyone, everybody and everything is listening, tight flow indeed
     
  8. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :deal: This is the real deal right here ! Loved this my brother Hodee :spin:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was great really enjoyed this piece
    thanks for sharing
     
  10. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Speak to the people man. Speak it Clear!

    Dope piece man, mos def something that fits my style.


    one luv
     
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