Quiet Poetry Lounge : every vestibule (of my being)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by baller, Sep 26, 2010.

  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Every Vestibule (of my being)


    “I Love You”
    With every fiber of my soul
    …From every vEsTiBuLe of my being

    ~ Where my most intimate thoughts begin

    I say, “I love you” coz it’s true
    Although, it’s not the summation of my feelings
    For you

    I mean…

    My feelings cannot be summed up
    In words
    Nor have you heard
    Of a love more intense than mine

    It’s hard to define
    RaRe
    To the touch

    And, though “I love you” Soooo much
    It’s not enough to…say…I…do

    “I love you”
    From every vestibule of my being
    …The deepest recesses of my soul

    ~ I know that sounds OLD

    But my love has traveled
    Across many ages
    In its quest to reach you

    I beseech you

    ~ Love me as I do you

    Share with me
    A sunrise serenade
    Whispered
    Along the everglades
    As nature paves our way
    Into tomorrow

    Ohhh…
    The beauty of
    ToMoRrOw

    The radiance of morning’s sunrise

    The magnificence of an evening’s sunset
    That wets the appetite
    For “tomorrow” days
    As today fades into yesterday

    ~ I captured “forever”

    An imagination
    Set aloft by high expectations of
    So many things

    ~ I dream
    Countless tomorrows
    With you

    “I love you”
    With every fiber of my soul
    …From every vestibule
    Of my being​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    true love in it's finest ......
     
  3. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    to love to its greatest degree...

    is an opportunity too many times passed up. THANKS for reading, $$RICHMAN$$

    the river floweth
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tru dat brother Baller , so often it pass one by beyond da eye of seeing it
    but da love is awesome to every degree set forth.
     
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    Whew! *Is it warm in here or is it just me?!*

    This "declaration of love" was some knee-melting, make ya swoon kinda romance!

    ....and I really liked your play on words with "wets/whets." ----good double entendre.
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    CherryB...

    even in love, unintended mistakes are made.:) so glad you're detail-oriented enough to have caught it...and brought it to my attention. THANK YOU.

    the river floweth
     
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    TotalView Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love how each stanza builds in intensity. It's as if the subject (to his own surprise) realizes, (the more he writes/thinks), how much in love he truly is. And he knows now because he stands a chance of losing her. baller, you painted a clear picture without being overt about it. You left a lot for the reader to discern his/herself. Nice job!

    Totalview
     
  8. Proverbs31Woman

    Proverbs31Woman Be kinder than necessary! MEMBER

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    Thank you for sharing this piece. What a deep love, and even if not returned...this is the ultimate experience, wow, now let me go take a cold one!
     
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    That Love Is SOOO BeautiFULL:)
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ladies...
    thank you for those kind words. so glad you found something within these lines to be touched by. yes...love is a beautiful thing. so, let us keep loving, and growing, and hoping for a better tomorrow.

    the river floweth
     
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