Black Poetry : Even Trade (we own this)

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ~inspired by a jazz piece "Gently Go" ~

    as you go;

    leave your heart
    beside the door
    your scent
    upon bare breasts
    still tender/warm
    from
    the heat of you

    (we own this love)

    leave your heart
    beside the door
    and gentle hand &
    fingerprints
    on thighs, hips &
    parted lips
    still quaking
    from
    the press of you

    (but not each other)

    leave your heart
    beside the door
    and liquid trails
    of joy streaming
    from closed eyelids
    still relishing
    the sight of you

    (we own this love)

    leave your heart
    beside the door
    and aching, lifeless,
    yearning arms
    that only want
    to cradle YOU

    (but not each other)

    as you go
    just leave your heart
    beside the door
    and a knowing smile
    as I recline,
    you gave me yours
    I gave you mine...

    (we own this!)

    Alyce, 2001
     
  2. belahni

    belahni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alyce

    something about the 'whispers' in between your verses. I could hear and see two people reluctant to part, but knowing they must. You paint the picture well; a place we've been ~ and if we're lucky, we can go back again.

    I did in this piece. Thank you sis.

    B
     
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    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Own on then.......
    Great poetry.
    :heart:
     
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    Alyce...

    As you go "Gently into this good night"...I am truly grateful that you leave your beautiful poetry to rest upon the ledge of windows and in between the crevices of doors. I am grateful for the dimensions of paper which lends itself to the ease of lines to slip under closed doors and slide through screens. This is indeed the author's ultimate sacrifice...to allow others to read.

    "Rage..rage...against the dying of the light..."

    *screendoor*

    a blackbelle edition
     
  5. cela

    cela Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aaahhh

    and she lay back
    caressing the precious
    heart he left behind
    his heart, he entrusted
    to her care

    and he walked out into
    the night, cupping his treasure
    in the palms of his hands
    he placed it snugly inside his
    coat against his chest
    to keep love safe
    in there



    Alyce, you paint pictures with your pen. Such an emotional scene...is there a part 2? :)

    CELA
     
  6. MsDLite

    MsDLite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you know how to send a message, sis!

    (speechless-****!)
     
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    Alyce Sista Gurl ...

    your flow plays music
    your flow paints pictures
    your flow makes love
    your flow is awesome

    thank you for this

    :heart:
     
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    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This That We Own....

    We shall never relinquish
    this that we own
    but we shall cherish it forever
    this love we own

    We shall never allow it to be foreclosed upon
    this that we own
    but we shall provide for its need
    this love we own

    We shall never allow it to be stolen
    this that we own
    but we shall defend and protect it
    this love we own

    We shall never destroy
    this that we own
    but everyday we shall give life
    to this love we own.
    :love:
     
  9. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow

    thanks everyone...

    jazz and good love does it to THIS sustah erry tYME!

    A
     
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    *bowing*

    as usual from the queen herself...
    Alyce
    this was again excellent....
    i'm impressed....

    j'hiah
    infinite
    from his serene garden..

    *bowing still*
     
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