Black Poetry : Even after the Day

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Feb 21, 2005.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I want you to be aggressive,
    And not so passive,
    Surprise me with your passion,
    And spontaneity…
    Demonstrate what you want from me.
    Be straight and upfront,
    Outspoken, reverently blunt.
    Let not my respect leave broken,
    Towards you.
    I’m not saying to step,
    Completely out of your character,
    But just help me not to forget,
    The morning after,
    And reflect with disappointed laughter.
    Let your hands speak,
    And let my body be the mike,
    As I listen to what you offer,
    As you portray what I like.
    Let our heads tilt,
    As we make the physical connection,
    Fitting our body’s creases,
    Like puzzle pieces.
    Let our breaths,
    Fall into the steady rhythm,
    Emulating the synchronism,
    Of perfect harmony,
    You and me…
    Finally…let’s finish this melody,
    As our occasional vessels of poison,
    Do the tango,
    Dancing to and fro,
    You lead,
    And I’ll follow…
    But I don’t want to tell you…
    I just want you to already know.
    Even after the day of love,
    Is gone and passed,
    Let’s create a vibe,
    That will forever last
    .
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whewwwwwww! this has a driving force and sweet ring
    i can get down wit this here ding ! tyte drop on da spot
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Chastity

    I enjoyed this piece. It took me on a rhythmic ride of sheer ecstasy as you expressed your desire for him to open up and take the initiative. Most women want that...expecting the guy to know even when she doesn't. (pardon the one line vent :D)

    :thanks: for sharing your expectation...no, not expectation, your desires of him. :D

    :toast:
     
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    What Women Want

    Brothers take heed.

    This is a GREAT piece of work! :court:
     
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    Chastity, I loved this. The rhythm was smooth, and the message, wanting your man to knowingly and passionately lead...I was shaking my head along with this. Great write.
     
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    Another tight flow, Chastity. Diggin it.
     
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    Hey thanks to all my brothers and sistas who responded. Much love! :hearts1: Please forgive me as I move this part one back to da top just so that the story wouldn't be so separated. Feel u feelin me poetically...don't stop!
     
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    Beautiful piece, I feel where you're taking this, and of course ...some of us do need directing sometimes.
     
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    lovin' it..

    eyes on you
    :toast:
     
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    girl...........:heart:in' it