Black Poetry : EVE

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  1. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I walk into the room
    you can't help but notice me
    Confidence envelopes me,
    like a second skin
    my scent wafts through the air
    You wish you could look away
    you are drawn by me
    like an artist's sketch
    Fixated like a statute
    as you watch my full frame

    Like Prince, you wanna be my lova
    hmmn, show and prove my Brotha
    Sista like me takes work
    not a booty call by far
    I am full time employment
    Day and Night
    I need to feed off you
    your presence
    your scent
    your love
    your,...ah.....blessing
    camoulaged by sagging blue jeans and tims
    or a finely tailored suit
    Ooops, over my head
    goes my shirt
    but my skirt,...you'll have to do
    on your own
    You must work for this

    Inspire me to part my seas
    feel my ocean
    Seduce me with common words
    with your personal spin
    make the innocent
    sound like sin
    Wrap me up in all you do
    and I'll be a romantic
    just like you

    A woman on your arm
    a freak in our sanctuary
    as long as you know
    how to treat me
    with peace and blessings
    your side, I'll never leave
    I'll be your missing piece
    your predetermined
    Eve.

    jazzymoonchild, copyright @ July 2002
     
  2. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    o.k l like the sensual
    sexual
    and "womanly" feel of this piece...
    sounds like Eve is worth the wait... hands down.

    nice,,
    jh.
     
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    Tell them brothas they must work for us! Good scribe, sista!
     
  4. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much, family. I found this piece buried in one of my old folders. I'm glad you could feel it the way I meant it.
     
  5. 7thPoet

    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My sister this was wonderfully woven. Some people just don't understand the power of the metaphor where it is obvious, you do...

    Every heterosexual man on the planet is in search of what you articulated in the above. And if any tell you anything different, they are LYING!

    great piece my sister...
     
  6. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, 7th! Peace and love is what I am about. Men search for their Eve like we search for our Adam
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!!! on point see what u do got me looking !
     
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    OldSoul Permanent Black Man PREMIUM MEMBER

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  9. MzBlkAngel

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    very nicely posed enjoyed the read
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reads like the "I'm Every Woman" Jazzy style. I liked the confidence in this piece.