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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by PlayWitItPimp05, Feb 3, 2005.

  1. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a dedication

    I
    pass by
    my winding life
    breathlessly exhilarated
    by the complications that create
    the personification of my abstract state
    you choose to wait quietly upon my crate
    of grievances and carry the load
    upon you, I cannot begin to
    tell you how much you
    are truthfully and
    most honestly
    appreciated
    in my
    life.

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this a beautiful dedication to one so dear and close
    very nice sista.
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To have that someone who bears the weight, and waits for you, that sounds like something special. I really like the way you structured the poem. Flow on.
     
  4. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Pimp, you should know this touches me so.

    Very nice, indeed.
     
  5. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awww! It doesn't get much sweeter than this. :hearts2:
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beautiful dedication thanks for sharing with us...Angel
     
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