Black Poetry : Epic

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Onichika, May 5, 2005.

  1. Onichika

    Onichika Active Member MEMBER

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    Epic
    Battles rage on
    In the middle east…
    Continues in the hearts of all men
    And never cease…
    From the faith filled to those
    Who don’t believe it….
    Just take a look and you’ll
    See it…

    The darkness engulfs the light in
    the day as well as the night…
    In spite of the abundance of love
    Theirs no actions to make it right…
    It can be compounded, but frowned upon….
    slightest hope in the people
    Breeds a new dawn…

    Gone from the thoughts of
    Many men…
    Survival ain’t a virtue
    To defend…

    So many warriors lost
    the fate of their souls is pending…
    Power hunger won’t stop sending…
    Misinformantion
    Ignorance, the jailer of a nation…
    Which refuses to raise to the occasion …
    Gladly puts on the disguise from
    those who take pride in subjugation…
    Now through a flat TV
    They can beam in their hating..
    price of your life raising but half point
    drop in homicides is forward
    progress that they stating…

    Perfected ways to pin point all your
    Fears for the one stop shop solution..
    No coincidence confusion reigns
    Supreme…

    Took both nuts in the pedestal and
    Projection of the plasma screen…
    System fights the under world to satisfy those who feen for inner peace…
    Ain’t no end in sight for the payments
    On your life’s lease..
    With good ways feast on your
    heart without desire….
    Slaving to isolate yourself with riches won’t bring you higher
    Stop feeding the fire
    Stop feeding the fire
    Stop feeding the fire

    Making honest men liars
    the heartless admired
    An people equating survival with dishonor
    the situation is dire​
     
  2. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice drop
    I look to to read more of your word
    Flow on poet
     
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    Ok....ok, poet, first things first
    you have a clean and very articulate style
    and a message that is rarely touched upon in poetry
    due to the difficulty to wrap words briefly
    around such a "grandiousque" global problem
    So I must commend you on taking on such a task
    it's obvious that you have a deep passion for societal ills
    I began reading this...
    and suddenly I thought..."this poet can write"
    "let me start over and take in what is being said"
    This was a deep and thought provoking poem
    I must say, the line "breeds a new dawn"
    hung in my mind like the moon on a clear night
    "Classic"...

    Keep writing poet...I like your style and your message
    Write on!
    Sage
     
  4. MrMister

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    this was nice I liked the way
    you played with your words
    and your choice of words was nice 2
    keep up the good work 4 real
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was outstanding and the way u did it made it awesome
    flow on poet flow
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This made me think about the life of suicide bombers and the like...Something I can't fathom, just living to die. Well written flow.
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was deep poet
    The vibe you gave
    From them plastering the hatred
    to everything else in between
    This was a mean drop poet
    Much love
     
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    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wonderful piece poet!:kiss1:
     
  9. Ms_MochaB

    Ms_MochaB Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    VERY NICE ..... EXCELLENT JOB POET
     
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