Black Poetry : Enunciate Please...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Nov 6, 2005.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Talk about confusion
    Or maybe, it was just
    a romantic illusion
    We had great conversation
    could discuss anything under the sun
    And I was thinking, perhaps we could
    be friends, and build a relationship
    Made sense to me, great things
    can and do develop from companionship
    I thought you wanted
    to embrace, when instead
    you actually wanted
    to have me in your bed
    See, I thought you said you wanted
    to hold me
    But you actually said you wanted to
    ho me
    To think that you would intentionally
    omit that L and that D
    And getting to know me first,
    wasn't seen as a priority
    So, whoops, silly me, for mistaking
    hold for ho
    And how foolish of us for taking
    up each other's time so
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Sister Watzin
    wow
    You just came direct with no pause at all
    how what one says is not what one means
    and you just flowed it with a poetic ease
    Hightlight "hold for ho"
    I had to crack up on that sis..
    I just enjoy how you shoot from
    the hips in your flows

    Peace
     
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    soblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a really nice peace.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow u broken it down to da max
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well, sista Bluewater, I'm still smiling upon your return. No, I didn't feel the need to beat around the bush on this one, lol. Glad you enjoyed the flow, thanks a million.
    Thank you much soblessed for responding so.
    Just wanted to be direct this time Rich, thank you much for your support and response.
     
  6. Akilles

    Akilles Banned MEMBER

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    Very nice.

    I liked your flow.

    And your story.
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Akilles for letting me know that you liked the story as well as the flow. Appreciated.
     
  8. LovNThySoul

    LovNThySoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked it. Letting your thoughts flow to paper. Line by line and rhyme by rhyme.

    Keep it flowin. Peace.
     
  9. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i can relate to this...well written...
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes LovNThysoul letting those words fall drip by drip. Glad you liked this brotha, thank you.
    Glad to know you could relate to my flow LovelyGoldenOne, thank you.
     
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