Black Poetry : Empty Promises (Just Cried)

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    your empty promises emerged...
    from the cracks of my mind,
    "promises" of
    "i love u"
    and...
    i'll never leave u again."
    and i remembered...
    the nights of bucking blak shadows,
    and sweaty sheets,
    covering our dark secrets.
    and blanketing our baby-mama drama,
    hiding reality from my eyes,
    for that moment
    those nights intimacy
    u...felt....good
    like a splash of fresh springwater,
    ur hands holding my heart,
    whispering in my ear
    sweet nothings never to be
    yet i was foolish enough to believe u
    while the promises fell down into the abyss of fallacy
    like the sweat that cascaded down ur back
    in our "lovemaking" (more like ur "lie-makeing")
    i let the stars lullaby me to sleep,
    then i awoke at the tyme of night where
    the earth pleads with the sun to merge with it,
    i let my hand linger to where ur face drunk in the
    midnights dreams
    till the sun rebirthed u
    a new day...
    a new man...

    only my hand felt nothing....
    but the imprint on a pillow where
    ur empty promises lay, and
    the sweat beads that contain my tears
    soaked into the sheets
    and brought my mind back into reality,
    u had left me,
    and all i could do is just cry.
    :)

    (c)copywrite,2004
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow....so sad.......very heartfelt....very nice piece...
     
  3. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks lovly goldenone im glad u liked it
    much :heart:
    -story
     
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    this is my favorite part:

    then i awoke at the tyme of night where
    the earth pleads with the sun to merge with it



    Hang in there, my girl. Many people will dissappoint you in life, but it helps to remember that it's about their fears and insecurities and not anything you've done. Keep your head up and stay strong, and all the love you give out will eventually come back to you. :)
     
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    I felt this one. Good flow very heart felt.
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    gempis: thanks for ur words of inspiration, my day is brighter than before.

    true love:thanks for the love, im glad u felt my flow,
    much love,
    -story
     
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    Ummmmm.............that was so, so sad. I loved your description of things. The way you explain things makes me think I was there.


    "the nights of bucking blak shadows,
    and sweaty sheets,
    covering our dark secrets.
    and blanketing our baby-mama drama, "


    That was tyte. Gurl, you talkin' bout I got skillz, you got more that I will ever have. I don't think I would ever be as descript as you.

    Much, much love,
    Foxy............
     
  8. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awww gurl, :blush: u got me all grinning an stuff, thanks for the love foxy, and im glad u liked reading me,
    much love,
    -story
     
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    WOW.................

    I loved it.................I'm speechless...this was so phenomenal!

    :spinstar::spinstar::spinstar::spinstar::spinstar::spinstar::spinstar:
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks angel, i'm glad that u liked it
     
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