Black Poetry : Empty days of sin

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  1. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Empty days
    Which drain my energy
    Pulling vigor from my soul
    As I fill
    With regrets
    Traced back to my first breath
    My first sin
    My first taste of death....

    Beautiful Spring decorates the sky
    Yet I'm Winter inside
    Bound by invisible chains
    Made of flesh
    And tainted blood
    Filling my nostrils
    With the aroma of carnality
    The stinch of dying deeds
    The smell of fear
    And the odor of humanity....
    *sigh*
    Inside
    I feel
    Empty
    Barren
    Aimlessly wandering
    Through life's maze
    Through peaks and plummets
    Through answered questions
    Through questioned answers
    Through life
    Through living death
    Through these empty days of sin!
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    write da script i hear ya here
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I been there way too many times, baby. This was eloquently posed - depression ain't no joke. Much love to you.
     
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    feeling you indded...that draining effect..taking that second breathe with you...feeling your vibe
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    Brother...

    we've got to stop meeting like this...

    you write

    I faint...

    I become conscious...

    you write more...

    and I'm in awe...once again...

    I hope your getting this...I LOVE YOUR VIBE...I LOVE YOUR MIND...I LOVE YOUR POETRY

    :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown:
     
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    I'm sitting here, smiling at this, not because it's humorous, no, it's because you so vividly painted a picture that's all too familiar for too many of us. Wow...
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feelin ya on dis
    nice drop
    as always
    Peace
    Angel
     
  8. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Much love to you fam!

    $RICH$- Most def....gotta keep moving the pen

    Gempis- We all have...but too many are afraid to admit.....hmmm...which is worse...depression or emptiness?

    Bluewater- Thanks for feeling me queen. Your comments mean so much to me...much love 2 u.


    Angelicsage- You make me speechless when you comment on the work. I garantee every thing you said about me is double to you. I feel blessed to have known of you my sister

    Watzinaname- Many times in my life this feeling has been a vivid reality. I thank you for reading as always!

    Mzblkangel- Thank you so much. I can always count on you for consistent love. That means a lot to me....much love 2u!!!!!
     
  9. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well, when you had the kind of depression I had - clinical, major depression that required medication - depression is far, far, far, far worse than emptiness.
     
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