Black Poetry : Emotional Turmoil

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LyricallyJacki, Oct 4, 2005.

  1. LyricallyJacki

    LyricallyJacki Member MEMBER

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    Hi everyone, I am a new poet, and I am enjoying the site so far. I want to share some of my poems with you and I hope you will enjoy them as much as I enjoy yours :)

    When you think of me
    What perception do you have of me?
    Do I make you feel brand new,
    Want me to be with only you,
    Do you smile at the thought of me?
    When I'm gone, can you still breathe?
    Am I your first and last thought of the day?
    When I leave, do you wish that I could stay?
    Do you see me around ten years from now?
    Making it through all the struggles somehow.
    Am I the only one that you desire,
    Wanting no one else, just me you admire.
    Or is it just me?
    Am I alone in this,
    Emotional turmoil,
    Feeling like you don't meet me half way,
    But I know you can do it,
    So what I gotta do babe,
    To make you wanna be with me,
    or at least treat me like I should be.
    I don't ask for much,
    Just for you to appreciate me,
    A little more than you've been doing lately.
    It doesn't take a lot you know,
    Just a little of what you've got to show.
    I shouldn't be confused about,
    Your feelings for me, there should be no doubt,
    In my mind that you
    Want me as bad as you used to.
    But it doesn't seem like you do,
    and right now I'm not sure what to think of you.
    Your words say you want me
    But your actions say otherwise,
    Like when I come see you or vice versa,
    no hugging, kissing, just "hello" chill and "goodbye".
    But you say I'm the one for you,
    Even though I feel like number two,
    I don't wanna tie you down,
    Just want to feel wanted when I'm around.
    I hope you understand what I say,
    Cause I don't want my feelings to fade away.
    You gotta try a little harder, I deserve it,
    You won't regret it, I put my word on it.
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your words flowed so genuinely. It's that feeling when you know that the person cares, but they are lax about really showing it. I enjoyed the read. Welcome to Destee poet. Hope to read more from you.
     
  3. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi there, LyricallyJacki
    welcome to "Home" ...we are all family here, that includes you.
    I like the piece you spreaded out to us...
    Sounds/seems like he care, but have gotten relaxed in the relationship, just drop a little spark under him...he'll be fine.
    thanks for sharing a part of your life with us, waiting for more
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    simply beautiful and divine here
    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of peace and respect
    welcome to the family of flow and love
    welcome from above as i bless this some deep love

    Keep sharing / flowing and spread love as love is given
    welcome you be kin now ..........look to read more of u
    soon LyricallyJacki.....WELCOMEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    :great: :spinn: :hi: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
  5. LyricallyJacki

    LyricallyJacki Member MEMBER

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    aaaaww, thanks guys! I am really enjoying this site, and I hope to learn a lot from you all being that I am new to this poetry thing, it's kind of how I express myself (I'm not that good with verbalizing) I appreciate you comments and I hope to learn more!!! :ilu:
     
  6. bigdrizzle

    bigdrizzle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I have found myself asking these same questions...I really feeling this piece! You expressed yourself very well thru yo writings...Keep scribin'!
     
  7. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome 2 the family. I'm looking foward to reading more from u.. I like what I am seeing.
     
  8. Sweet baby_face

    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to the site.
    It's nice,ain't it?
    Loved yr piece.
    Will be looking formore.
     
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